Moon Goddess

Moon Goddess

A Poem by Sabbath_Nikole
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Mythical Girl #5

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I sit atop the moon

Watching chaos down below

What's a girl to do?

 

She'll never meet your hollow gaze

But if she does

She'll see into your very soul

Your darkest secrets

 

She sees the world

Squirming down below

So safe up high

But all alone

Screaming children

Oh, they break her heart

 

A monster keeps her locked up tight

Alone

 

Shooting stars

Offer cold company

But she spies a warmth

On another side

So far away

 

This thing she loves so much

Is that of which she steals her beauty

 

Never she'll touch

Those things growing green

Living

Never she'll touch

The face of worshippers

Believers

 

Belief in her

And she can't show she's there

Listening, visiting the dreams of those

That believe in what cannot be found

 

She's seen everything

And yet

Believes in nothing

© 2010 Sabbath_Nikole


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Sabbath_Nikole
Original 2004

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this is a beautiful poem that tells a sad tale of longing and wanting to be more than what you are. It is a story of loosing hope. this is spun in a magical way and the imagery is beautiful. the flow is easily followed allowing your story to come across loud and clear without disruption. Beautiful piece of poetry.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I realllly love this poem! I love how you associate the Goddess, who many would think is perfect inside and out, with the way many perfectly human people feels.
Beautiful write :)

-Pokie

Posted 11 Years Ago


I appreciate how you give such a human personality to a god like being. How despite the fact she see's overall, there are people who yet to believe in her. A truth that reflects a "person" of such a role. Your poem was truly consistent, you had pauses in the right places. In all honesty i would love if you used better diction, but a good poem nonetheless.

Posted 11 Years Ago


I like this. It's very mysterious and draws you into the story very quickly. Great job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


The ebb and flow of life and hurt, a beautifully voiced poem love
xx

Posted 11 Years Ago


Very beautiful poem

Posted 11 Years Ago


love it keep it up

Posted 11 Years Ago


Very nice write. Good descriptions of longing and loneliness.

Posted 11 Years Ago


A very good poem. I like the logic of this poem. You create a story that i could believe. Being so far from the pain. Would you understand the pain. A outstanding poem with a very good story. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Fantastic poem. Sadness, pain, loneliness and longing. You captured it all very well.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"So safe up high
But all alone"
What brutal honesty.
The way this ended really tugged at my heart and touched my soul, this was a beautiful write. You teach a valuable lesson here, one that is not embraced often enough.
-Cathrine

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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I am a thinker, in some ways Im considered an adult. I have a passion for some things that could rival the suns heat. Im not just another face in the crowd. Im a sister to two, and a cousin and godmot.. more..

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