walking with fingers

walking with fingers

A Poem by sad-eye
"

it was a very odd night when i wrote that..

"

Ohh

this is the time when he drops his pen

on the girl he had scribbed

she is looking from behind

wanting to get out of there

 

The paper is a place to meet others

meet the others who can be your bees or knees

who can help you to get back up

 

She kicks the knees and paralyzes

she is walking her head with little fingers

the head and the fingers, they didn't damage

and those fingers will also open her teeth

and be the only way to get her to talk.

© 2008 sad-eye


Author's Note

sad-eye
haha please correct my grammar or whatever if you see something wrong ! im here to learnnnn ;)

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What a strange but interesting piece. For some reason this reminds me of the Addam's Family. Click! Click! :)

Posted 16 Years Ago


I would say you need to tighten up your grammar, but your style leaves it so open and it gives it a fresh perspective on poetry. If you want to be grammatically correct, then you'd change it. But I like it exactly as it is! It's you, and that's what counts. Welcome to Writers Cafe!

Posted 16 Years Ago



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sad-eye

Helsinki, Finland



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