Tick tock

Hands spin round in a hypnotizing blur,
the clock face rears its ugly head.
Time slips through the fingers,
no matter how hard we grasp,
the saviors today will be shadows tomorrow.

"We will not fade silently into the night,
we will not go down without a fight",
a beautiful tune,
but you hit the wrong key.
Our voices not heard,
Years still pass, no matter our plea.

All pity forgotten, the truth sets in,
horrible realization,
time goes on without giving us a chance,
a chance to catch up, to get a grip,
on what is really going on,
until it's gone, gone

Author's Note

I don't feel like this poem is complete yet, but I've had serious writer's block, so I published it anyway. If you have any ideas to make it better please comment. Critisism is appreciated!

Reviews

[Emmy]

Time is something that can hurt and relieve, and you stated that well throughout the poem. Truthfully, it's hard to write about time, because it's just one of those things that people view in so many different ways. But no one could tell time any better than you just did. I didn't see any typos or mistakes. It's up to you to decide to change anything or not, but I love it as is. I enjoyed this poem, and I can't wait to read more of your work. Keep up the good work!:)

[Sadiesmiles]

Thanks!..........:)....

[Emmy]

Of course! Anytime! Thank you for sharing!

[Clara]

This is such a great poem!!! Every time I read one of your poems, they keep getting better and better!! I'm running out of things to say Sadie!! Keep up the great poems!!!

[Sadiesmiles]

Thanks Clara!

[Clara]

Anytime!! Can't wait to read more! Trust me, one of these days, your poems will leave me speechless. ;)

[Shaquana Adams]

time goes on without giving us a chance,
a chance to catch up, to get a grip,
on what is really going on,
until it's gone, gone

I think this poem can be considered complete if you want it to be. Time really is a cold hearted b***h in this aspect and I like how you captured that. Nicely written :)

[Sadiesmiles]

Thanks!...........😄....

[Tina Louise UK]

Time is an enemy to us all, excellent piece, enjoyed :) x

[Sadiesmiles]

Thank you!

[Linda alexander]

"We will not fade silently into the night,
we will not go down without a fight",
a beautiful tune,
but you hit the wrong key.
Our voices not heard,
Years still pass, no matter our plea.
all pity forgotten.
Very clever and great write, a universal nakd truth is bundled up in eighteen lines of a poem, fully succeeded in projecting the truth, I wish whoever reads this poem will tell every day to themselves that I will try to dream, try to enjoy the minute i have in my hand, reinforcing the word will try, that is more than needed, ability to say that I will try, very relevant topic and thought provoking enjoyed it fully

[Sadiesmiles]

thank you!

[Linda alexander]

You most welcome