The Rope version #2

I spent every moment weaving this rope

Delicately weaving

Making it as strong as possible

Making it so thick it could hold anything and anyone

 

You helped me weave this rope

We worked on it together

Day after day we worked

It got thicker every moment we spent together

 

But one day I fell....

 

Down....

Down....

Down...

 

I could feel myself falling hopelessly

When all of a sudden you threw the rope

I grabbed on to it as tightly as I could

 

And there I was

Dangling from a cliff unable to save myself

I tried to climb the rope

But I couldn't

 

You started to pull

Tirelessly pulling the rope

I moved a little each time

But I continued to slip

 

I watched the sharp rocks that greeted me at the bottom

You swore you wouldn't let go

That nothing could break the rope we had made

 

But my eyes couldn't help staring at the rocks that waited for me

But I believed with all my heart you wouldn't let go

You promised

I believed you

 

But when I looked up at you I saw weakness growing in you

I saw the judgments of others haunting your mind

I saw fear take over

 

And then it happened

You let go....

 

You let go of the rope we had made

You watched me fall hopelessly to my doom

You stood there and didn't care

I even saw a small smile appear on your face

 

How could you?

You let me fall

You didn't care

You broke your promise

 

You let go of the rope

And now I suffer because of your selfishness

Someday you will be dangling from that same rope

And someone will let you fall

They will watch as you hopelessly fall

 

You'll know what it's like to fall

You'll know what it fees like to be smashed into rocks

You'll see what it's like to have all hope in the rope

You'll undertsand

 

And when you fall

I'll be waiting for you at the bottom

 

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

Nice write! I thought that the concept was really interesting; it was unique and a really beautiful yet complex metaphor. I liked the fact that this poem seemed to read kind of like a narrative, as it made the build up of the piece all the more effective and the end result feel all the more personal. A lovely write,
~PaperHearts

[quinfinn]

great job! this a marvelous personification of betrayal. i'm stoked by the sheer genius of this effort...this one, my sweet...is now in my library.

[Celeste21]

Poignant, even when he falls you imply that you will still be there despite the wrong he did. Many woman in battered relationships have taken this plunge and continue to take it. Congratulations on your piece :)

[White Ink]

very very deep, strong, powerful and honest.. i can feel the anger and disappointment..

Grats for winning 1st place! u deserved it :)

[*skittlez*]

nice write i love it very cute and awesome

[India Brooks]

What amazing last lines! Completely made it and brought it to an incredible close. What a brilliant poem with good use of imagery and metaphor.
India

[MuSe Ampoule]

"Mwah..ha..ha" should have been the last line. Joking aside, this was an exquisite write. Very visual. Great job.

[Nothing Personal]

Well this one's a allegory. The rope obviously is the relationship. And the strain to stop it from falling while you were failing in it, was its difficult times. And then no more. It was let go. A sigh of relief on his face. A smile. It fitted nicely. Interesting theme. I got reminded of "What goes around comes around comes around " partly and partly of " Yeah, I'll be waiting for you in Hell, if that's what it takes". Well Done. But was there a version 1?

[Geralyn Miller]

Ah, yes, what goes around, comes around; call it karma, fate or kismet, or take the biblical route, "So as ye sow, so shall ye reap."
You have written a work of great power.

[Marie Harrison]

Powerful poem.