My perfect kiss

My perfect kiss

A Poem by sarah

We walked slowly in the mist of the night
We held hands
His sweet eyes gazed down at me
My heart skipped a beat

We slowly strolled down the lane
The Christmas lights glittered brightly
All the way down the lane
There were bright lights

As we walked he stopped
And paused for a moment
Our hands were still intertwined
He smiled at me

I gazed up at him
Curious as to what he was doing
All of a sudden he pulled me close to his body
He wrapped his arms around my waist

And for a moment
He just stared at me
Like he was taking a picture with his mind
He moved some hair out of my face

Then he bent down
And sweetly pressed his lips against mine
A cold breeze blew through
But neither one of us felt it

His kiss was sweet
Tender
But full of passion
And romance

It started to rain gently
But neither of us cared
I ran my fingers through his hair
He gently lifted me slightly off the ground

But then all of a sudden
Something happened
Something I hadn't expected
Something terrible
I woke up

Alone....

© 2011 sarah


Author's Note

sarah
I have never been kissed and I am 17 *sigh* but this is how I picture my first kiss. I hope it happens just like this :-) hey a girl can dream right! haha

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this is so beautifully touching and sweetly romantic that i was in the moment and feeling your emotion. sweet 16 and never been kissed, it will come along. prince charming is out there somewhere and he will ride up on his white stallion and sweep you off your feet. what a lovely poem !

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Posted 13 Years Ago


Don't be in a hurry for that first kiss or anything else. When it happens it will be wondrous, even though it may be clumsy.......wonderful piece!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very romantic poem, ending turned it tipsy Topsy, enjoyed reading it..... good imagination and may your wish come true....

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is how a first kiss should be bravo

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a beautiful poem and I hope your first kiss is just as special as this

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You've got me there ;)) with your last sudden bang! Yeah just go on dreaming that way, mmm it's so worth it:)

Well written, soft, romantic, touching - wonderful. Great job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hey girl, I was a teen in the free love sixties and I was seventeen when I got my first kiss, I wish it had been as beautiful as your poem, primarily, it was awkward.
But things got better. If all people were honest you would find many who didn't have a first kiss until even older than you are, and there would be some who wished they had waited for that first kiss.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very sweet poem
It's quite cute

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

awesome poem..first kiss is something u will always remember in your heart..
good to see the true love in this piece..
ending is sad though..
good work:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So sweet a kiss that it's worth waiting for the bliss.........Good twist, but one day the dream will become a reality....never settle for second best :O)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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My name is Sarah just another Sarah, to go along with the millions of other Sarah's hehe anyway umm...I am really bad at spelling C and grammar it's a pain in the a*s so...yeah I won't U review books .. more..

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