And she knew

The realization that a relationship has to end

She's sobbing now, she has to be brave
She has to end it, her face to save
She feels a fool, she feels ashamed
Her heart is in tatters
She thought to him she mattered

She saw his eyes turn to another
the calls slowed, they trickled,
then there was none

and she knew
the dates became less and less
her emotions were in a mess
and she knew


she saw him smile, that special smile
she know that's his style,
and she knew
with heavy heart she lifted the phone
goodbye my love
I have to go...............

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

Pain and tragedy of having to let someone go, because you know its the right thing to do, is always the hardest thing.
The line conveyed this message very truly to me.
As it began, there seemed to be a moment of hope, but in the end with the phone call, it was over.
Great job here!

[Nico]

a wonderful read Sally........heart-breaking......excellent poem!!!

[Michael X]

sally this is a touching writing, and cuts straight to the matter, many aspects can pull the readers heart strings, the descriptive emotional effect, just is just a few things i would change, or perhaps use this as a good outline.

She's sobbing now, she has to be brave
She has to end it her face to save
She feels a fool she feels ashamed
Her heart is in tatters
She thought to him she mattered

now the wording in this stanza, it has to be figured out in context and punctuation, its grammatically confusing, and you start with a rhyme form and switch off, i can see there being two seperate circumstances and thats perhaps the reason for wording it, i think this would have worked better with just free flowing thoughts minus the design, there is a slight spelling error in the caption, "realization"
i can honestly say it feels like this poem was rushed, though the great thing is the messege still comes across with potent effect, your skill for writing is obvious, being a fan of your work, i'd still give it 100,
as you are able to write situations that many people can relate with true understanding, mike

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

This is good - it hurts to know but then when you realize it is what is happening... it just takes your breath away.... sometimes you thought you knew.....but when you know for sure.... oh, that really hurts...... You made me feel it - that is good.

Kath

[Forest Green]

Nice portrayal of the nuances of diminished affection. Very good, short and sad.

Forest

[None]

The content is so sad but your writing style makes this flow wonderfully. A touching story within your poem.

[SweetPeachesAlways]

Her heart is in tatters
She thought to him she mattered

I like this line very much...don't we all feel that way at one or another...
Very nice flow...beautiful write!

[Alexander W. Quinn]

Sad, but kinda catchy, almost like the chorus to a song.

[Phil Sanders]

Sad and beautiful ... lovely emotive writing .....

[Erin]

wow. that seriously almost made me cry! it would make a great song, i think. :]
fantastic job!

question, though: was there any reason why you were using caps in the first half and not the second? i read it as a physical way to show how her emotions were wearing down and she was becoming more of a mess, but idk.