Chapter 3

PLAY THIS WHILE READING MY FRIENDS!

Chapter 3

My strongest belief is that nature should be our guide through life. People see Native Americans as foolish for believing in spirits and allowing nature to guide them through life, yet we allow tiny electronic gadgets to rule our life. No man’s beliefs can be any more foolish in the eyes of another man than them unto oneself. And so much is happening in nature right now, and it is natural, and eternally good. For example, right now, colonies of ants are going about their daily activities. Birds are soaring above the clouds. A fish is exploring the wreckage of the Titanic. A man is discovering his true purpose.

What does the voice inside your head say? It doesn’t matter what you say out loud, but it matters what the voice within the confines of your skull decides to project for you alone to hear. Nobody else but you can hear this voice. It is a way to have a private conversation, and discuss your deepest secrets. But do you trust this voice? What does this voice say? That is for you to know, and for others to discover from what you do with it.

Ok. Enough about the creepy crap going on in my head. I have a story to tell, and one that will surely make your blood turn to ice and wrap your mind around an unforgettable tale of love, adventure, and discovery that goes beyond the intellectual comprehension of the human mind. Listen in.

Reviews

[Jacob Clifford]

I retain my statement that these first three chapters could all stand as one chapter. As they are, the first chapters all feel unrelated. They read more like journal entries (making these isolated chapters into journal entries would be a neat idea, I feel)--completely different from each other, and full of different thoughts. It really detracts from the already slowly-progressing story. Yes, they're meaningful and thought-provoking, but they do nothing to tell a story.

[Stars and Whales]

I think I will turn them into a journal entry! That is a good idea, and I think it will make them add to the story much more in that way

[Justin E]

Regarding this chapter, I agree with what others have mentioned, namely that it is currently difficult to see how this, even if it is a journal entry, progresses the story. I am not saying that it's bad, as I enjoy reading the philosophy of the narrator, and it's certainly interesting. Maybe as I continue on into chapter 4, I will see more of how it all connects. The narrator is definitely an interesting character, so keep at it!

[Lyn Anderson]

I like this, but it may need to be moved in the finished piece.

[Stars and Whales]

Of course :-) I agree

[savanna.r.f]

Wow I mean this is some deep sh*t. You explain things so well, ways that make my brain buzz with...I don't even know how to explain which in and of itself is a good quality for a piece of writing to have on this website. Can't wait for the next chapter.

[Stars and Whales]

thank you my friend

[Kat Mandu]

Nice. The style is interesting, I would like to read more as there isn't really enough to make a proper judgement on the story. It's mysterious, and the imagery used is intelligent, which I like. It makes me believe that the story will be one that goes beyond the intellectual comprehension of the human mind.

[Stars and Whales]

Glad it made you think the way it did! It's supposed to be deep and mysterious! Glad you liked it, and let me know if you do want to collaborate on something.

[Phillip W Parsons]

Very interested in the next part of the story. I'm a lifelong sci-fi fan and would encourage you to boldly go forward with your endeavor. I will definitely keep reading.

[Stars and Whales]

Are you a big Star Wars fan? I sure am

[Christopher Stephenson ..]

Still like but it is a good beginning. good stuff. good job.

[Stars and Whales]

A collab is when we collaberate on a project we're working on to fix it and work out the errors within in and make it the best it can be! We can do this for both our work!

[wordman]

it seems we have our own roads to travel,laid out by someone before us! who knows whats real..

[Bear]

OK, I really like what you have written here but it threw me off from the last chapter, which I had to go back and reread as you had me thinking you had started something new. You need to highlight your commentaries like this so they are not read as part of your story or we will all be confused. I can't say enough about how well I like what you have written but maybe what I write below will give you an idea. Five out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Being part Blackfeet Indian (and no saying the word Indian is not being racist) myself and being raised with many of the beliefs and traditions of tribal life, we worship our old spirits much like the new spirits man has created in modern times. The worship of the many religions like Hinduism, New Age, Buddhism, Islam, and Christianity plus all the anti-religious spiritualist and satanist, we can forget those who worship fame and fortune. So there may be more modern spirits to guide people than there are with the old beliefs. In short, let them think what they will and remember the old saying, never argue with a fool for people will have a hard time telling one fool from the other!

[Stars and Whales]

Thanks for your review my friend! Good suggestion, I see where you are coming from. That last part made me laugh, and it is so true! Thanks for that.

[TheMalady]

First of all: very impressive. Is this some kind of a prologue? I like the theme here, it's deep and mysterious. You're guiding your readers to the deeper realm of the human mind. I wonder what it is. It's creepy and interesting at the same time. Also, regarding this line: It doesn’t matter what you say out loud, but it matters what the voice within the confines OF your skull decides to project for you alone to hear.

Overall, this is an interesting chapter. Looking forward to the next one and thanks for sharing! I love the Star Wars music, it fits with the mood of your story. :)

[Stars and Whales]

Yes, well, that music can go with any sci fi story and give it a boost, really! Thanks for reading my friend!

[TheMalady]

You're very welcome! I'm glad I read your work, dear. ;)

[Alucard6336]

Hi old friend. I call the insects zombies....they always tend to get to me in the end.

I ain't gonna lie to you, I like where you're going with this story. :)

[Stars and Whales]

Appreciate it buddy!