Amidst the Bedlam

Amidst the Bedlam      by Sami Khalil

A modern English sonnet

This pirate ship sailed off with clueless dreams

A loutish course, dreamers cautiously row

Mimed abed somber nights, dredging up schemes

Fallen leaves and of twigs dappled in woe.

 

Whether life or the mind, they ambush us

Leaving behind trails of retrospect things

No pride is left when we lose the game thus

Justice can play out its underfoot swings.

 

Time to ponder, to walk jostling slower

Naught but guile-less how smugly we view paths

How death can be a checkout line’s goer

Subduing varied moods, joy-filled to wraths.

 

Things elude us, hidden down in plain sight

Grasping at straws, we clutch unto dawn’s might.

 

Reviews

[Thomas W Case]

This is great writing. I love it.

[Sami Khalil]

Whoeeee! Whoaaaa! I love it. Thank you kindly Thomas W Case for the awesome visit.

[Pete]

well they don't call them pirates for nothing. hide my peg leg and ignore my black beard as i walk this sonnet's narrow plank. a real eye-opener. now if i could just find that map where "X" marks the spot ... :)

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe! You are so kind and funny. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences. I guess Boston had its share of pirates on olden days. Maybe you write about some of them. Up to you.

[Dave Brown]

Would the raw, murderous, uncouth, female preying pirate, ever have dreamed that his ill-begotten, barbaric behavior be enrolled in a finely done example of the difficult sonnet poetic style?
Only Blackbeard could say!

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe! You are so kind. You never know what transpires on those rough seas and sexual waves. Lolread moreHehehe! You are so kind. You never know what transpires on those rough seas and sexual waves. Lol
Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences.

[Zoe Richardson]

I love all the subtle images you create with this poem. There are so many ways to interpret your pirate voyage. I know most days I feel boarded and scuttled! Kudos for such a visually creative and verbally intriguing poem!

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! Thank you so much dear poet and friend for this wonderful review and sharing. I might come and rescue you, take you on an adventure; just kidding.

[Chris Shaw]

Grasping at straws yet we must not let go, because where there is a will there is hope. We all deserve to navigate the sea of life in peace and that is where my thoughts travel. Master of sonnets Sami, you cover so much ocean with your lines. Always a pleasure to visit you.

Chris

[Sami Khalil]

OMG! An honor indeed coming from a master poetess in her own right. Thank you kindly dear poet and friend for this wonderful review and sharing.
Hope and positive thoughts, accompany an active will as you marvelously state.
You are a blessing on this site.

[emmajoygreen]

Read this twice, once aloud, Sami.. so wanting to share your voyage. But seems we need follow our own course, taking the weather, the clouds and the sea as they hit or miss us. Too many squalls are as dangerous as the doldrums' cruelty, we try to keep control, with or without a crew but.. life is chance and we have to take it. Yes? No? Or, do we curl into a squidge in the back of a cave and feel the flow of the ocean gradually wearing us down.. down.

Your wording is inspiring here, Sami; plus, that striking painting spotlights your fine sonnet' s many metaphors. You must be related to Canute, you know the oceanic hows and whys!!!

[Sami Khalil]

I love it; your review is poetic and beautiful. I can relate to King Canute. All you shared happen to all of us. I can't thank you enough for sharing your thoughts and experiences

[emmajoygreen]

Was my pleasure, Sami.. it always is when I read your poems

[Sami Khalil]

Same here. Gracie millee

[Linda alexander]

There are plenty of things which can rob our dreams chronic diseases strained relationships financial and emotional insecurities wars natural calamities goes on and on when we are in this life ship. The rough reality is that we do not have control over these and at times have no defense against them. What is left us to do is eat the desert first as we have is this moment. Great poem Samie. Lots of footing to real world .

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! I agree wholeheartedly with your wonderful truth and wisdom. I can't thank you enough; all are factors indeed.

[Sami Khalil]

You are so right
No defense against them.

[Lydia Shutter]

The dawn will break....as it always does. Too often it seems the world is quite unjust to us. We can be ambushed by both friend and foe. Dreams, though, are always held onto. We believe we can will things into existence. Of course, we have no such control, but the thought can keep a person going at times....even while walking the plank! Lydi**

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! I totally understand and agree wholeheartedly. You are wise indeed. Thank you kindly for sharing your thoughts and experiences.

[andrew mitchell]

The ship of life but can we swim if we walk the plank? Who knows where we sail, it’s where ever the wind takes us. In the meantime we dream on.

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! So true and well articulated. Thank you so much dear poet and friend for this wonderful review. Glad to see you.

[redzone]

a 'life' sonnet and well done... it raises the question of dreams and dreamers and what we accomplish along the path of life... are dreams just that, dreams? wishful thinking or are they goals to be achieved and struggled for, real, sometimes met, sometimes not?? and can we change life, and affect its flow in ways that make a difference?? there is a poem by Mao Tsetung called "Ode To The Plum Blossom" in it there is a line which says, "She seeks not Spring for herself alone"... it is a metaphor, and what you poem invoked in me was this line and poem and in saying, if our lives are for Spring (used as metaphor), and we live for more than ourselves, then the dreams we have are ones worth striving for and making real.. our lives will have meaning...
Sami, your poem has once again given me thoughts about who we are and what we do in life... it is art that entices and inspires... thank you dear poet!!

[Sami Khalil]

OMG! I'm blown away by your review and its truth along with your marvelous wisdom. I sure like the quotes you quoted; so pertinent to this one. I like to go with your second question and our effects, efforts to see our dreams come through. They all take visions and efforts to come through. Some do, some don't. At least we made the effort and applied what we believe in deep down our consciouse.
Thank you kindly Redzone for all you write and share.