The World

The World

A Poem by Haruki

Quiet morning

Sitting in the room,

You're still sleeping.

Outside the window

Grey mottled clouds

Fill the sky.

Church bell chimes

In the distance.

Suddenly a stream of sunshine

Breaks through the cloud cover

And brightens the world

For a few seconds,

Then gradually fades.

I wonder if you stirred;

You are my world.

© 2008 Haruki


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Again, you exhibit that exquisite simplicity, like the atmosphere's change after a cleansing rain.

A principal loved-one is indeed the world. And beyond that, the freshness of a new breath of life, and the poignant mystery of clouds in the sky, of light streaming.

Even when you don't do the formal 5-7-5 haiku syllables, you retain the shining intuitive clarity.

Excellent!


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This is a very beautiful and delicate piece of writing. Excellent work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is so charming really. I like your style
You are so orginal, You write wonders.
A very wonderful write here, it warms the soul

Posted 12 Years Ago



Again, you exhibit that exquisite simplicity, like the atmosphere's change after a cleansing rain.

A principal loved-one is indeed the world. And beyond that, the freshness of a new breath of life, and the poignant mystery of clouds in the sky, of light streaming.

Even when you don't do the formal 5-7-5 haiku syllables, you retain the shining intuitive clarity.

Excellent!


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is my favorite kind of poetry- short, powerful, beautiful and yet simple. being able to combine all three is a show of true talent. bravo!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was a soft and beautiful expression of love. Wonderfully done. PS

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this as well as the thought behind the wording, the sweeping imagery,
the blissful emotional projection of love, the creative sentencing has
moving effect, romantic, passionate, embracing and very well written.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Haruki, this is absolutely beautiful. Your imagery is captivating. I love the ending, how romantic. A delectably delicate write. Keep up the good work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh that is so tender... you really put so much love and passion in such few words... what an amazing gift you have.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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