Music Box

The piano plays softly,

each key breathing a note.

The rhythm slow and steady,

my focus distantly remote.

All color washes out,

black and white taking over.

Figures appear before my eyes,

An apparition of lost roamers. 

They dance along the piano,

feet barely reaching the floor.

Suits and elegant dresses fuse,

back and forth they go.

Diamonds glowing, ball gowns flowing,

we've landed back a couple eras.

A handsome lad comes along, 

his gloved hand outstretched.

Our hands intertwine,

the floor collapsing underneath.

The piano still sings a lullaby,

your eyes the color of spring leaves.

We're twirling inside a music box,

We've been forever so.

But this song is coming to an end,

Please don't let go.

But we're still dancing.

We'll be forever so..

Author's Note

Thank you everyone for sticking with me. I hope to keep writing :) Please review!

Reviews

[mariah]

"The piano plays softly, each key breathing a note. The rhythm slow and steady, my focus distantly remote." beautiful! i love it, i can picture it all like a movie in my head but what i love most about this peom is that it takes me somewhere else, far away. you know writings good when it has that power :)
-mariah

[DearSweetAgony]

This poem is very well written. I love the feel of the ball, and how it perfectly flows together. Good job, I enjoyed reading.

[nishantshah2381]

beautiful as always

[Mashairi]

This is beautiful :) Your writing never dwindles from amazing

[yashsickle]

Very soothing and relaxing. Paints a very vivid and classy picture. I like :D

[Alicia Hirshey]

I love this.

[STAR CHILD]

this is beautiful it draws you in and en captures you and hold you in its grip

[SaintCory]

I don't know what to say about this, other than that it made me legitimately smile. Thank you for a happy day!

[Kiri Nells]

I really love this! It's absolutely beautiful. My only issue is the fourth stanza. With the 'template' you were using throughout the rest of the poem, it seems out of place. Other than that, it's really very well done. :)

[Fairytale]

I loved this, too. It's magical. I felt like I was being taken into another world. This poem was incredibly written. You are truly talented and I am glad that you intend to keep writing.

[Maryum Mazhar]

I love this poem

" We're twirling inside a music box,
We've been forever so.
But this song is coming to an end,
Please don't let go.

But we're still dancing.
We'll be forever so.."

You have powerful words and triple s.
Triple S is something I made up : short, simple, sweet. :D