Wretched

 

This wretched existence I would live again

If only someday, in that next life

We shall be forbidden no more

From embracing the flames

Of the passion we both feel

The longing we both know

The endlessness of our odes

And all that is left unspoken

 

This wretched destiny I tried so hard to understand

So I made myself believe that perhaps

The heavens were afraid that if we were to be,

We would outshine the moon and the stars

With our elixir of love, a fusion of our dreams,

Enchanted tales and flawless poetry,

The song of my smile and your melody

The same breath of life that flows in you and me

 

This wretched truth I wish to undo

I want to escape from reality to be with you

And we shall live together in our dreamscape

Where no one can hold our happiness in their hands

The scrolls inked with your fate shall be ablaze

And rain’s spirit will wash away the haunting past

Light from the shadows shall be awoken

To tell the world that some pacts can be broken

 

This wretched heart longs for all that you say

So don’t say goodbye and cast me not away

The sun will rise after the darkest night

To tell us, and the world, that we have won the fight

Behind every great love is a great story

And our quivering quill shall chronicle the glory

Of love, beautifully forbidden, nonetheless true

For that, this wretched life I still live for you

 

 

© Maxinne Marie July 20, 2007

Reviews

[Teresa Gunn]

Absolutely lovely. You've outdone yourself. Nothing is quite so poetic and heartwrenching as lost or forbidden love.

[Memnoch]

Well Maxinne your fans have spoken down below. I don't know if there is anything left to say but great work!! I did like the lines "This wretched truth I wish to undo I want to escape from reality to be with you." Now that was poetry to my heart. Thanks for sharring.
Kelley Frost

[Everyday Is Just Anothe..]

Awesome emotion in this poem. I really liked this line: "Where no one can hold our happiness in their hands"

good job!

[Roger F Aucoin]

Very nicely done. I especially like the line "The song of my smile and your melody".

I would suggest you complete your creation by completing the punctuation. Keep writing and send me more invites so I don't forget to read your works.

[Jeremy]

A poem full of emotion and splendor. You truly have captured your hearts aching and your souls want. I can almost feel the love that you have for this person, and I wish you luck with this endeavor. Nicely written, and beautiful flow. Lovely.

[!FireCracker!]

Wow, just wow. i'm beyond blown away, this is great and i'm afraid if i say anymore i'll color myself a fool, so i'm recomending you to a couple people that can give you the review that you so richly deserve! Again, a wonderful peice!

[Krista Laraine]

I cannot believe you are 16.....I believe age truly does have an effect on the quality of poetry, but not on the natural inherent talent. That is in your soul, it has no age. But you will see if you continue writing throughout your life that the experiences that come with simply living life will enrich your writing. The fact that you can write this well and powerfully at 16.....the world better get prepared for Miss Maxinne.

"our quivering quill shall chronicle the glory"

Krista Laraine

[Barry S. Maltese]

Some hearts do not speak. But your hearts shares it's love, and pain, through your written words. Maybe in another life, maybe in another pair of eyes, you will share that love with someone who can love you equally - That is something you deserve. Beautiful writing. Very touching.

[* Mourning Starr *]

I have to be brutally honest with you concerning this poem, this has to be the most extrodinary poem I have ever read, I loved it and I am going to pass it on to some of my friends, for being so young you are very talented in your writing, the flow was amazing , the imagery unmatched wonderful job, excellent write Maxinne Marie, I look forward to reading more of your work..

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Great poem ended very nicely. Well done.