A piece of Heaven

Just a short poem I wrote. This was written years ago, not from personal experience. I find inspiration from everywhere. Just a short note, poetry is not my strong suit, but I still wanted to share :)

I told him I loved him

he told me he cared

he promised forever

didn’t count on the tears

I took it for granted, he’d always

be there, that nothing could change

the love that we shared.

I watched him come in

late nights after work

he thought I was sleeping

never knew that I hurt

I looked past the lies, through

the truth I could see

I loved him, but still,

he didn’t love me

I went through hell to find a

little piece of heaven

I thought I could change

the way we were living

I thought I could bring him

back to my door and that 

we’d be happy just like before

I walked through the fire and was

burned by the pain, the hell that

I went through was sure to remain,

but I found a piece of Heaven wrapped

up in his arms, the devil at night

an angel by dawn

I wanted to leave so that I

could be free, from the shame

and the heartache, that love

had found me

His lies were like hot coals

burning my skin, leaving behind ashes

to blow in the wind

a jury of demons, my fate to decide

to doom me to hell and torture my pride

But I remained faithful and sometimes he tried

and gave me the hope, that our love

would survive

it was then in those moments

the sun would shine through bringing heaven

to earth as angels can do

I found my wings and

decided to fly

they were hidden behind the

tears I had cried

spirits bent, but not broken

my soul was at peace

my little piece of heaven, I’d found in me 

Author's Note

Edited a line...thanks Cryingkate for the suggestion :)

Reviews

[Fran Marie]

A lovely flowing piece with a even rhyme theme..well crafted and nicely expressed..

[Writergirl]

Thank you for reading and the kind review!

[Terry Richardson]

loved this poem and shared a link on facebook to it, I have written over 10,000 poems myself and feel partial to other poems. Great work on this one.

[Writergirl]

Oh wow, thank you. I'm honored you thought it was good enough to share the link. :) Thank you for the positive review!

[just another mac withou..]

whether secondary or not this is a strong write. sad though....

[Writergirl]

Thank you for reading and commenting :) I tend to write a bit moody sometimes :/

[Samuel Dickens]

These words are inspired--"the devil at night, an angel by dawn." The story is one that many will know, but some of those won't find their wings. You did well. (poems are a secondary effort for me, too)

[Writergirl]

Very true, some don't have a happy ending :/ Thank you for reading and commenting!

[rickm97]

Outstanding! Love it! From reading the comments below, I'm glad that was not from your personal experience.
But it sure sounded like you lived it. You put your heart on full display.

[Writergirl]

Thank you :) I'm glad you liked it

[rickm97]

You're up early like me. This is my favorite time to write. My creative energy wanes as the day goes on.
Write more. I'm looking forward to reading it.
Last night I posted "Coming home fallen." Would appreciate your thoughts, certainly at your leisure, though.

[Writergirl]

Absolutely, I will be glad to read it.

[Ben Noah Suri]

Lovely moving write... The wings "hidden behind the tears" was a great touch.... Faithfulness of spouse is a diminishing commodity these days...

[Writergirl]

Thank you! Yes, it is. Luckily for me, this wasn't from personal experience, but I have seen many broken relationships from that type of betrayal. I hope my marriage is never one of them.

[Cryingkate]

Loved the poem, Looking forward to reading more.

[garrshaw]

Nice! Wings behind the tears... wonderful and true. Even in your poetry you have those excellent closings.

[Writergirl]

Thank you so much for reading, I'm glad you liked it!

[KittyKatgirl]

Great job :) I loved this poem. Keep up the great work!

[Writergirl]

Thank you so much!! Glad you liked it :)