Origins In Coral~

It began underwater

in a silver pool

my gills

my scales

molting

until my body complemented

the yellow dress

sewn from his idyllic orthodoxy

while he

covered in prayers

opened his wings under the sound of rain

the wailing of the trains

hitting a frenzy

scattering notes

roman numerals

random patterns

impressing themselves into the side of old buildings

while I

floating in his onyx iris

in my yellow dress

caught fire

my flames, monarch butterflies

pouring out of the ink of my stains

in vines the length of my spine

until my body curved the sky

above the molten city

and he

covered in prayers

entered my patterns

drew himself a temple in my outline

centered his piece in the topography of my puzzle

 

it began underwater

crawled across the mud

climbed metal spires

spread its wings

but the gills dragged it down

back down underwater

 

god thing with prayers

sewn into his skin

not quite girl in yellow dress

eating pomegranates

under the sea

my fingers dreaming the underbelly of a whale

haloed in reverie

god thing's mouth dreaming the back of my long neck

where, trance in a dark stone

at the base of my elongated skull

gives him nectar as balm

he, discarding prayers from his skin

I, smiling in my yellow coral dress

 

 

 

 

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Reviews

[Crowley]

I never come away from your writing without being awestruck or without learning a bit about the use of our language...this was brilliant. The whole thing was mythological, fantastic in scope and creepy as hell. The last stanzas were so good...fanfreakingtastic.

[Marianne]

Emma said it all...before I could get a chance...I have missed reading you...and here you are offering me your unique take on Creation..."he, discarding prayers from his skin
I, smiling in my yellow coral dress"...I am smiling as well

[No use.]

so that's how it all started
sensual strokes , the ink dripping , along wisdom curves , pouring entity into an empty sea ..creating a world where you smile in your yellow coral dress

[JelliFyshKissUs]

The beginning... the genesis... growing into your yellow dress...
If only spirituality was seen by all with such vividness and beauty.

[luciddreamer]

Wow.... love the story....such vivid details brings it to life :)
Peace
Robin

[Dream Weaver]

"my flames, monarch butterflies
pouring out of the ink of my stains
in vines the length of my spine
until my body curved the sky
above the molten city" Love it
Love it Love it......

[Kerry O'Connor]

You have the ability to put together such stunning pictures in words. I'm in awe.

[Maurice]

Exquisite, as always. I never tire of reading your work.

[Ed Hart]

reading this my wings grew some new feathers; unfortunately, my head got a little horney

[FireWoman]

The Mud Girl reaches further into the mystical beginnings. Are we really Adam & Eve's children? Perhaps we are Gods even aliens thrown here an a cosmic experience.
I think writing like this should be at a child's bedside to further broaden their minds, filling them with more wonder & sparking that flash of mind.

[Sweets]

This is the best poem you've written till now :)
Can't really decide which one is the best, because they're all amazing! :D
I loved this and I loved every piece you've written :)
Great write! :D