How Does It Feel?

How Does It Feel?

A Poem by iamshadowine

How does it feel?

When you're oblivion

How do you think?

When no one cares

How does it feel, when you’re missing something special?

How do you know it’s right

How does it feel?

Letting your close ones go?

How do you think?

About not thinking about them

How does it feel?

When your lover is with someone else

How do you think?

To not get back to them

How does it feel?

When you’re talented

And how do you feel?

When people just ignore it?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2016 iamshadowine


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Now I have what to think about for the following days. Thanks for sharing this moving questions :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

thank you! :D
This is a superbly penned poem. A healthy amount of despondence and sorrow is hidden in the depths of this piece. Well, when people do not care about you, it does feel bad. The best solution is to return the same- you too stop caring about them either, rather, focus on making yourself better. A very heartfelt poem. Keep writing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

thank you :D
I like the idea behind this one. Poems with a repetitive structure can be very strong but your 'how do you feel' structure is not maintained. Also should it not read 'what do you you think?' Well done but with a bit of work you could improve it a lot.
Regards, alan

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

thank you!!
Really enjoyed this! only constructive criticism i have would be maybe shifting the flow of the poem?
Maybe created some spaces between the sets of " think and feel " ? , I may have just mis-read your approach to it, but overall i thurrily enjoyed this :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

thank you!!
hmmmm really interesting...............

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

thank you :)
I feel like everyone can relate to this, at least once in their lifetime. Your poem reminds me of my high school days. Great work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

thank you!!
I somehow relate to this piece. nice job.

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

thank you :D
VR Zette

7 Years Ago

ur welcome ^^
So right! that is how it is across the world.


Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

thank you :)
It's a shame that so many people walk in the shadows when they should be basking in the light.
It's usually the wrong people in the spotlight.

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

thank you for reading and reviewing :)
Ana Papaya

7 Years Ago

You're welcome and I should have added that I enjoyed your poem...
Great work. :)
iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

thank you :)
this piece of writing is really too interesting...

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

thank you :D

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Added on June 21, 2016
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