The Last time I saw Your Face

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The last time I saw your face

your eyes were glowing in the moonlight

moonbeams formed an aura

like a halo placed on your head

 

........but you were no angel

 

The last time I saw your face

you brushed my hair from my eyes

kissed me tenderly

and promised me forever

 

.........but there was no forever

 

The last time I saw your face

you wiped the tears from my eyes

held me in your strong arms

and offered me shooting stars and moonbeams

 

........but there were no shooting stars

................and moonbeams fade

 

The last time I saw your face

I gave in and you tasted

the eagerness of my quivering heart

 

........but I did not have yours

 

The last time I saw your face

my world came to an end

my heart torn in two

 

........blindsided

 

Because the fact is

 

The last time I saw your face

........was

................the last time I saw your face

bj smith 

aka shallimarRose

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Author's Note

Thanks for reading..feel free to comment or whatever.. xo

Reviews

[one sky]

My goodness! This is it. This is totally heart-breaking. The anaphora is an emphasis of the pain the voice is enduring...
So emotional...but written perfectly beautiful. The words, the format, the flow..I love them all. This is superb! Thank you for allowing me to discover this gem, Rose.

[shallimarRose]

No thank you for taking the time to come and visit my pages.. shallimarRose

[Zahra]

This is really very well penned rose, amazing.

[Kelly Scheppers]

The repetition of your title is what gave this a pulse for me, for the staggering revelation at the end is something most of us are all too familiar with!

Much enjoyed!

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Kelly, yes for me too.. The ending line "the last time I saw your face was.... the last time I saw your face" would not have had the same impact.... Glad you enjoyed this one.. xo Rose

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

A poignant and descriptive read. You really know how to pen emotions. Enjoyed!

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Sharon.. Im glad you did enjoy and that you took time to visit me here.. xo Rose

[RainDancer1997]

Very well described almost as if I felt it too. great job:)!

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Rainy.. huggs, Rose

[Rahul]

Nicely penned, words're powerful.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Rahul for pausing to read.. shallimarRose

[Clara]

Sometimes, we believe what we want to believe... but it is what it is.
Good write, SR. X

[shallimarRose]

thanks Lola.. xo

[Frieda P]

Love the ending, how we want to believe when the person we love makes us promises, we are so willing to fall for them. A little tenderness goes a long way but it's hardly a life commitment, I felt this one slimmer.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you.. xo

[Rita L. Sev]

There is a weeping in this poem, heard as I read... We are never really prepared for the last time... Beautiful and heartbreaking piece.

[shallimarRose]

thank you.. xo

[shallimarRose]

MIXED REVIEWS ....... now that it has been read by some I will point of the thought behind my writing this piece... He looked like an Angel and promised her the moon but as soon as she gave into him he was gone... "I gave in and you tasted the eagerness of my quivering heart" Though I have experienced somthing similar when I was younger this piece has no emotional ties or foundation in my real life..
xo shallimarRose