Rain Rhapsody aka (Rhapsody of the Rain)

 

 

I sit here in sweet silence

but for the tapping on the pane

listening to the melody,

rhapsody of the rain....

 

Gentle glistening petals

hold up their head to quench

the smell of air made pure again,

cleansed of the city stench....

 

Reflected in each rain drop,

I see a tiny glimmer

The streetlight standing at the curb,

brings out that certain shimmer....

 

I'm rocking oh so gently,

don’t want to miss a beat

as each and every droplet

the tempo does repeat....

 

The sound is ever calming,

and soothing to the soul

I stare there at the windowpane

and watch each droplet roll....

 

I sit here in sweet silence

but for the tapping of the rain,

listening to the melody,

rhapsody of the rain....

 

The wind now joins the chorus

and howls soft and low

and adds a wave of ripples,

there on the sidewalks glow....

 

the branches of the willow 

how poetically they sway, 

in harmony they seem to dance

with the oak tree down the way…

 

The tempo picks up speed now

 as I see the darkness flash

I hear the roar of thunder,

with a giant drum-like crash....

 

I sit here in sweet silence,

And from each word refrain.

Listening to the melody,

Rhapsody of the rain….

© 2005 bj Smith

aka shallimarRose

 

 

 

 

 

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Author's Note

comments and critique are welcome. Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[bobc]

You seem to have indicated this was a work-in-progress...so here I go again (I'm smiling as I write this, btw)...the tone is wonderful, the images clear and resonant. The meter, however, jumps around a little.

Based on what I'm hearing when I read this aloud, can I infer you're striving for a count of 7 beats in the first line of each stanza, 6 in the second, 8 in the third and, finally, 6 in the fourth? The stanzas that hold to that, sound fine to my ear...the second, fifth and last stanzas for example.

I can provide suggestions if you'd like...email might be a better venue for that. I'll leave that up to you. For a WIP, this is pretty good anyway...bobc

[shallimarRose]

uneven tempo was intended... 6 7 8 syllable count bounce around throughout this one Feel free to message me. Not really a work in progress.. It was written like 29 years ago and has remained unedited.. Thank you for reading.. xo

[bobc]

Message sent. Everyone feels differently, I guess. I treat all all of my poems as works-in-progress. ...bobc

[shallimarRose]

ty.. i know most do that.. i rarely edit.. This year is the first time i am revisiting to edit for a book...
usually i sit down write , shelf and thats it.. Rhyme is very natural to me..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"rock me gently, rock me slowly, take it easy don't you know, that i have never been loved like this before"

there is rhapsody in the rain in this..there is love...but i also sense pain tapping on the window..

with the double meaning of "pane"--

really sets a mood.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Jacob very much for your nice review. shallimar

[Kelly Scheppers]

...I'm a rainy girl, myself, Shallimar...and I love this!

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Kelly for coming to read and comment. shallimar

[Relic]

Awesome. This is going into my favorites. I wish I could have written this. The only critique: but for the tapping on the (pain) Should it have been pane?
I stare there at the window(pane)

Excellent poem Shallimar.

[shallimarRose]

LOL thank you and I know that.. that damn spell check gets me evry time so im glad you guys catch it for me.... Ill fix it now thank you . xo