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All the same, All the Blame, Has been Deleted

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He types away his sadness, 

Ignores his calls

Ignores his family.

She is gone,

They have said their long

Goodbyes, 

And now she is gone, 

So he types away, 

Click, click, click, Click

Back space,

Erase it, 

Pleas she says.

Hold the key down,

Erase it all

And it will be gone, 

All of the sadness,

All of the shame,

All of the sorrow,

And all of the blame,

Has been…

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Author's Note

Well? am i getting any better?

Reviews

[nyi]

haha..this was really fun to read..i like this very much..'types away his sadness'...nice phrase...

[snapjack]

It's pretty good, actually. Very imaginative, using love as a computer. Awesome poem

[the_stoic]

was this a parody ?? if only life could have been a file on the computer .. all the pains and miseries could have been deleted .. nicely imagined

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

It is sad .. when love ends it is always sad to me .. using computer terms for me makes it even sadder.. very nice writing..

Chloe

[Randy`s Princess]

ok this is good are you saying goodbye to a love here sound like that to me it`s a good read though all the same

[James Paulin]

I would like to revise my review and say that the emotional turmoil is well written and the poem is a modern description of heartache over lost love. I was off on my first overview...apologies

[Rhine Wolf]

wow!! and you still ask if you are getting better? oh yes! that you are, really liked this one there was so much pain in this one that i could actually feel it.

brilliantly inked!!

Blessed Be,
Fallon

[WriterMe]

Well to be honest I'm not very good at reviewing poetry so I cant gauge your potential, sorry. But as reviews go, I liked this piece mainly for the meaning it possessed and the level of sorrow you managed to convey is such a few words. =] Great work =]

[NinjaPi]

Most def. But you wen't bad to start with. I love this. Its really emotionanal not to mention you beautiful use of repitition. it really lends power to your writing.