The Visitor

The Visitor

A Story by ShaneBerry

while i as watching a ghost hunters episode, i realized how rude it must seem to ghosts when they go up into the attic or abandon house and uproot their privacy... I DO NOT BELIEVE IN GHOSTS.

The Visitor

Three hundred years ago I died,
it was a warm summer eventide.
The leash rapped round my neck,
My mind an emotional wreck.
Last year entered the peeress,
in a long, shiny blue dress.
She cried tears,
and I whipped them away.
We talked,she was not afraid.
But she is gone, 
no more,
now you are here?
With your radio,
and camera gear?
Who are you to invade my home?
To call me out,
and claim your own.
You threaten,
or offer,
how can you help?
to Save me from this cage my hand hath dealt?
I throw and a shout, but you just smile,
you say you will leave in “a little wile”
whats your rush? 
You wanted to see,
is this not cruel irony?
My whole life I was ignored, 
until my mortal body was no more!

© 2011 ShaneBerry

Author's Note

i say i dont believe, but i guess it could be possible, i just think that if they were real they would have let me know along time ago lol,

any ways, what did yall think?

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Nice! And I don’t really believe ghost are dead people according to my religion they are demons. So people shouldn’t mess with ghost cause your really messing with demons. And actually when you think your messing with demons they’re actually messing with you. It’s not worth it. Anyways I watch ghost adventures it good show,

Posted 5 Years Ago

Great ending. Great write! :) I enjoyed it a lot

Posted 12 Years Ago

A very good ending to the poem. I like how you led the reader to the strong ending. Ghost are with us. I believe we are less important to them then them to us. Thank you for the excellent poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago

For being a non-believer, you hit the nail on the head with this.

Posted 12 Years Ago

I really enjoyed this poem, it flowed really well, and I love the concept behind it. Well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago

So far, your best poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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It's a nice story, I personally have experienced the paranormal, so I believe in it firmly, the story was amazing, spot-on wording, thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago

This is well written, the flow of conciousness simply dances. I really enjoyed how your 'ghost' seemed to explore his memories of his past life before turning his mind to accuse his intruders. The only error that I could find was that you spelled 'rapped' instead of 'wrapped' in the third line. Excellent job:)

Posted 13 Years Ago

eek >w< Ghosts
Gorgeous imagery I must say, I really did love reading this :D


Posted 13 Years Ago

oooh now I dont believe in ghosts either but I`ve seen enough stuff to convince me they do exist but this is a good discription of ghosts well thought out maybe you should watch X files or Most Haunted or The Third Kind that`s a good film :)

Posted 13 Years Ago

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19 Reviews
Added on June 12, 2010
Last Updated on September 11, 2011
Tags: ghost, haunting, story, death, hunters, adventure, scary, sad, old, ghoul, monster, creepy, abandoned, suicide.



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