Outlandish Lust

Fun with rhymes

Outlandish Lust   6/6/09


Of all the things that I have discovered,
and all the things that I've attained.
With all the lands that I have covered,
and all the friends that I have gained. 

You were the biggest surprise to say the least.
I'd have a better chance of slaying a mythical beast.

You're not from around here I can clearly see.
It's not those electric blue eyes that give you away.
It's the vibe you release that washes over me.
And the out of this world things you subtly say.

Seeing your fire red hair that whips
in the wind like dancing snakes.
Makes every fiber in my body vibrate
and violently shake.

I am intrigued by your poison lips.
I want to kiss them without consequence.
Yet, my confidence slowly slips
as I approach your excellence.

I love the feel of your green tinged skin.
I never thought I'd fall in love with an alien.
You shift your shape and blend in
not unlike a chameleon.

And so I wonder what planet she's from.
And why when I see her, I am struck dumb.
She moves with the grace of fine feline.
One day I will eventually claim her as mine.

I don't care whether anyone agrees.
We will get married and have lots of half-breeds.
Someday I hope she will introduce me 
to her technically advanced color coded family.

For now I am content to explore our strange connection.
If we are invaded by evil E.T.'s  I may need her protection.

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Jamey,
This was so creative in the desire for what is not understood or known. We people are so much like that; looking for the unknown and wanting to possess it. I would love to know what spurred your imagination to write this fun poem "outlandish lust?" All I can say is you gave a new light to a thought provoking romp with a new kind of "friend" not known before. Bless your life and writing! Kathy

[Jamey]

Thank you so much! Oddly enough I was inspired by a Lil Wayne rap song haha...The green tinged skin line came to me...it also reminded me of most of the alien girls in the original Star Trek show ha

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Jamey,
Oh, ok; that makes sense. You found inspiration from a song you really liked and star trek. I love the process of writing and the creative ideas people have. Your sources spur me on as well. It was nice of you to share. I wondered if you would. Thanks again.................Kathy

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Love this poem, bro. Not only did I feel everything you felt/limned, but I was left thinking you actually met this girl lol.

[Jamey]

It would be interesting to meet a girl like this..I suppose you can look at her attributes metaphorically haha..thanks a lot man!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Yea it would. You're most welcome bro!

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Haha, this is a lovely playful write. It's really very clever. I think for most men women are somewhat alien ;) I really enjoyed this. Starz

[Jamey]

You couldn't have said it better...most girls confuse me haha...I suppose there are several ways to look at this which is why I love poetry...thank you so much for the comment!

[Jennie Baron]

A very amusing and thought-provoking premise... love with an alien. Especially one who seems even more changeable than human women can be! And you have stated the feelings so that the reader relates to the narrator.

The only thing, I hope you correct the spelling of the title, assuming it's supposed to be "outlandish."

[Jamey]

I fixed that thank you! I appreciate your feedback...I had much fun writing this

[Tabby Mac]

I LOVE this piece! It's fun and cleverly done!! From the rhyme to the content! I have no critic other that I LOVED it!! IT MADE ME REALLY HAPPY, happier than it should have I think, but this is my honest thoughts! I'm glad I stopped by!

[Jamey]

I'm so glad you enjoyed this as I had so much fun writing it