Purest of Sin

This poem is following the theme of unrequited and forbidden love. Written in the point of view of a girl in love. Inspired by a poem I came across recently. This is my take on it.

I love her with the seasons, with the winds,

As the stars worship, as anemones
Shudder in secret for the sun, as bees
Buzz round an open flower: to kiss

then part within the hour, and leave

behind a heart to grow beyond her age.

There's no one else I hunger for, nor touch

That makes me feel I must take off my skin.

If it so pains to be so in love, and cause

God's creatures to be wrenched at sea - 

Then how it must hurt to live without pain...

Truly, I am Incapable of living 

without a heart that's worth my keeping.

Willingly I'll take Love's briery crown

To proudly bear the humiliation of Peace and Sincerity

For I am throughly devoured by my love for she 

Who possess my heart - 

What tearful longings for the purest of sin - 

My angel, My all

And if she should die, if I were left at large

On earth without her - I, on earth, the same

Quick mortal with a thousand cries, her spell
She fears would break. And I confront the charge
as sorrowing, and as careless of my fame
As Christ intact before the infidel.

Reviews

[Girl-with-no-name]

I can feel the love and the passion.Good job ! A lot of emotion. Keep it up

[sharonlee]

Powerfully emotive with very rich imagery.

[Karen Preston]

I like it. Especialy the beginning.

[Earthy Mumma Soul]

I loved how it started .... soft and gentle .. xx

[Art]

nice work...expresses how love can be so...deep, caring, heart breaking...

[EileenMarie]

Very beautiful....... I do agree with That Girl that the last stanza doesn't follow the theme as much.

Nice Job

[That_Girl]

I like it. Sort of reminds me of something I wrote a while back. I don't think the last stanza follows the theme as much. It isn't as soft and romantic as the rest of the poem, in my opinion.

[unshakenScene]

this is good kep it up