Goddess Not I am

Its about me.......

 

 

I am what I would have wanted to be,

I am the aspiration of myself.

 

I am a butterfly when I want to tickle the flowers,

I am a bird when I want to compete with the flecks of cotton overlapping the sky,

I am the river when I want to mock the stand-still mountains,

I am the sand when I want the turbulent sea to rest on my shoulders,

I am the rain when I want to splash in the puddles,

I am the rainbow when I want to paint the bland sky,

I am a mother when I want to love selflessly,

And I am me when I want to be free.

That’s what I am,

Everything.

Because I am blessed to be,

To be a poet.

And imagine the world of me.

I AM FREE & UNBOUND.

 

 

Reviews

[A.J. Smith]

This is absolutely wonderful...what an amazing piece of writing! First of all, your keen intellect and creative mind (both qualities I am drawn to in a writer) are clearly demonstrated. Secondly, I love your structure and flow. Thirdly, you paint such fantastic images with your precise use of language and words.
Perhaps the only change I would suggest would be to consider dropping the word "at" from this wonderful line: "I am the river when I want to mock at the stand-still mountains." I look forward to reading all of your future work. Thank you for asking me to read and comment on your work. Please send more!

[Lauren Xena Campbell]

I like the expressions portrayed by a very poetical voice. Really captivating write!

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

This seems to be a woman that is aware of herself and the many possibilities that consist of very nicely done. It eludes self confidence. Bravo Great Write.
Debby

[PoemRodent]

Very well with imagery and written in fashion. Great job!

Dostani

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Quite beautiful. A wonderful expression of who you are. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[ah]

this is the essence of freedom, i love it, makes me open my eyes and realize that anybody has this capability, great write keep writing

[Robert Luna]

Such a true statement we are everything and anything that our imagination can think of. We live to create and by doing that we are able to achieve so much more than what was thought of before. Our dreams are food for our imagination as it is able to give birth to such wondrous things. Painted with our words a whole world can emerge from such things

[Blue Bard]

This reads like a religious text, celebrating the unity of all life. You have shaped a positive outlook into beautiful imagery. My only suggestion is that you delete I am free and unbound. You have stated that by implication and the poem ends so much better with and imagine the world of me. Good writing.

[None]

Wow, this is really beautiful. It's hard to pick a favorite line. Everything flows so wonderfully. I was reading this on your profile thinking how profound--it is even more so as a poem. It's very lovely. Your title is very meaningful. I'm not a goddess either, nor do I proclaim to be, so I can relate to it! Your poem is glorious and holds me spellbound.

[SweetPeachesAlways]

I love it! of course, one can never alter perfection...thank you. I have already posted it on myspace! And I signed it Shinjini...I hope that was okay.