Locked

Sometimes I feel like I'm locked inside,
locked inside this place.
No place to run,
no place to hide
I wish I had some kind of magic so,
I could just disappear and never come back.
I'm trapped inside this body,
I feel like I can't breathe
because if I do I might not have enough
to last the rest of the day.
I need some kind of miracle,
something to keep me alive,
for I feel that I'm slowly drifting away.
I've lost everything and everyone,
lonliness is all I have left.
I wish that you were here with me,
for you image has slowly faded away.
And the memories are no longer in my mind.
Help me please to find that happiness
I once had,
bring me back the joy,
for that is the key to this hole.
Take me out and bring me back to life,
a life we once shared.
What a wonderful fantasy we lived in,
until you left and I parted in two.
Here I am, locked once again
where there's no room for dreams
to come true,
just enough for your hand to pull me through.

 

Copyright © bluestars .... [ 2006-06-15 00:18:28 ]

Reviews

[Adrian K. Smith]

That sense of being trapped, locked up, and no escape - that confinement. Needing "them" to be free.

It may be because of having felt it or it may be because it was simply there, but I sensed changes in pace that changed in the right spaces.

[Dani California]

Yes, this definitely tugged at heart strings and brought forth memories of heartbreak. I think heartbreak is an enormous crippler of mind, body and soul. It's such a helpless feeling to have your emotions controlled by another. Though, as life would have it .... time heals. Holding on tight to the slightest shred of anything remotely solid is required, but as time passes... so does the pain.

Okay, enough of my little speech... I'm sorry! lol Went off on my own little journey there... again.

Back to your part in this... the POEM! Very powerful and full of emotion! You conveyed the heartbreak perfectly and its structure was great as well! Excellent write!

[Jane Doe]

This is a wonderful poem that I can relate to. Great writing!

[Mav]

They say good poetry should bring out some kind of emotion on the part of the reader. Well this one did for me, Blue. I think anyone who has lost a loved one either through a break-up or a death can relate to this one. Excellent work.

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Ahhh . . . such sadness and longing. I'm going to post a piece I wrote a few years ago, called "Lock The Door".

You are an inspiration . . . and a beautiful poet!

SP