Deja Vu

A Stream Of Consciousness Effort If You Will...

The car splutters
Starts
Petrol vapors
Burns, smarts
Eyes in tears
Mind meanders
In-out, in-out
Tomorrow's near
Hell,
Tomorrow's here
Excuse me, sir
Mutters
Bloody beggar
Gimme a penny, Sir
Stutters
Grumble, mumble
Fumble
Trouble
The engine dies
More trouble
Horn honks
Jibes, taunts
Start the car, goddammit
Wait, awhile
Smile
Please, smile
Patience, dear
Mind meanders
Tomorrow's here
Insecurities, fear
Warrants, arrests
Handcuffs, bail
Godforsaken jail
Hell,
Are you serious?
No really, jail?
The car splutters
Starts

Reviews

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. this entire poem is an incredible metaphor for everything that existence entails ... and it touches the surreal in parts ... it's amazing to write free verse ... one gets to explore the nuances of exquisite poetic expression within the realm of brevity ... it's like a simultaneous evolution of thought and vocabulary ... initially, it slows one down ... but then when the momentum picks up ... there's hardly any difference between an aspiring poet or an aspiring philosopher or for that matter ... an aspiring politician ... ultimately, it's all about skillful communication through words ... preceded ... but of course ... by congruent actions that speak louder ... i truly believe that words have to be substantiated with action ... rather words usually exude conviction when they are preceded by action ... as actions speak louder ...

[msharma]

Incredible well polished verses drafted.full of ornamentation and deep dwelling thoughts.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the quick bursts of today's existence seeded in a happenstance~ a scene that relates the breathless/thoughtless rush of nonthinking movements humanity engages in every twenty~four hour cycle of existence~
wild ride of your pen pouring ink in rhythm that kicks the brain into critical thinking motion~bravo!

[Sukriti Suki]

wonderful!! I am in awe...wonderful work.

[Emily B]

very skillful use of words

[vivekanand]

very experimental.. infact , it creates that intended impact.. good work, dude

[Arabdha]

marvelous..i rarely get to see such tactful usage of the simple plain words..and with such meaning..hats off !!

[imawriter]

jail eh.... hmm..... sounds like me on my way to work... disjointed thoughts... well, except for the jail part... never been arrested...it's a great poem

[Babe Roxx]

I Love your flow, you can just feel what you write...where you've been and where you are going. The sights, the sounds...I can almost taste and feel it. Excellent write.

[theunionisloud]

Deja Vu... of everything, ever! Such a universal idea that I cannot think of anything that does not apply. Great work.