Moon, My Dear

Dropped from the night sky

She is the moon,

She is a loner in the night sky

She has a dark side.

She sometimes shows half, sometimes she disappears

Because she is scared.

Sometimes courage blooms and there is the full moon.

Spots tainted her surface, not her beauty.

She is bright just to her might

Do you call her ugly or weak because of these?

No.

You must be blind if you say yes.

If not the moon, then why call a girl with same traits bad?

She too is a moon, my dear!

Reviews

[Stonz P.]

Uhhh... Everything was nice except the last four lines... They are very weak and take away the charm, in my opinion. I wish you'd work a little more with better adjectives adjective and keep the use of 'her' instead of 'a girl'..
Hope it helps.
It is a good piece.. I liked the metaphor and my favourite line was 'Spots tainted her surface, not her beauty.'

[Namrata]

I can agree with you, I could err work better. Especially to end it. It is obviously of help and pleasure to have you reviewing this. Thank you.

[Stonz P.]

Constructive criticism is what I am here for, in fact what everyone should be here for. People line up praises without even telling what they liked about the piece; they may as well have not have read the piece yet expect the favour returned.

[Namrata]

True that. I appreciate people like you to come over often.

[Swati Nayak]

A poem with a sweet message within.
Remember beauty is not how it appears but how it feels ..

[Namrata]

Thank you.

[Surya pradha]

carries a great message, i agree with your poem. well written!

[Coyote Poetry]

The Native Americans called the moon. Sister moon. It is part of the old myth. I like the logic of the poem. Woman do change. Best be ready for the good moments and bad. I like how you used the moon and the woman. A understandable comparison. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Namrata]

This comparison lingers, that is all I hope. Thank you.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Sami Khalil]

A very lovely and enjoyable poem. Thank you for sharing...:)........

[amrit]

throughout i was thinking about referring the moon as `she` until i read the last lines.. honest an enjoyable read.. :)

[Namrata]

Thank you :D

[Mayank]

Beautifully written... there are endless things one can write comparing with moon.

[Namrata]

Thank you.