Do You See Me?

this is a poem that just kinda came to me...... I just sorta started thinking.

Hello?
I'm standing here. 
Right here!
Why can't you notice me?
Why cant you help me?
Why cant you save me?

Do you see me?
I am here.
I'm waiting for someone,
to notice me,
to help me,
to save me.

You can't see me.
to you,
I am invisible.
I don't exist.


Or can you see me,
but try not to.
can you see how I need help,
but won't offer a hand.
can you see how I need saving,
But won't call that number.
911.
 
I have gone insane,
but you couldn't tell.
 I had made sure of that.
It looked like all is well.

but now you see the real me
the troubled, lost me.
And you have to understand,
the position that I am in.

 I am in trouble
 I need help!
I thought I could do it on my own!
But I cant!
I can't survive one more day!
You are my last hope!

You could help me,
If you wanted to.
But you don't want to.
I know that you don't,
 but I don't understand,
WHY?


I will end this.
I will end me.
I will give in to those voices.
If you cant help me,
If you can't save me,
If you can't see me.

Please.
Please.
Tell me!
Do you see me?

Author's Note

if you don't get the poem it is about a a girl who has gone insane. who needs help (because the voices in her head are telling her to end her life) so badly, that she will kill herself if she doesn't get help. She is trying to find some one that understands (because she doesn't) who can see what is happening. nobody has seen it so far, but she goes to one last person... So tell me if you liked it.PLEASE rate and Review! I'd love to know what you think of it!

Reviews

[Silver_Anime]

i really like this poem! it kind of pulls you in and puts you in the position that the girl is in. its very interesting ^_^

[Abbie]

thanks for reviewing Archia, I really apreciate(sp?) it. About who she is going to for help....Um, my Idea was kind of this: she already tried to help herself but she didn't know how to (that was when she was basicly hiding her insanity from the world). then she starts to get worried, and acts differently( trying to show that she needs help), but nobody notices. this is when she gets really worried because she knows that she is going crazy and nobody will help her, so she startes to think to give in to the voices.thats is basicly where the poem comes in. she kind of goes to some person, probably a guidence councler(sp?)... i didn't really come up with a person. so, yeah that is pretty much what happened( in the poem). so I hope that this tells you more and thanks so much for reviewing!

[Archia]

I love how the writing seems almost rushed, like what's going on in her head; it fits wonderfully. I enjoyed all the repetiton of the 'help me, save me...' that stuff. I'm a bit confused though of who it was that she went to for help, was it herself? or was it someone else? At first I thought it was herself, but I'm not so sure anymore.
Anyway, really nice poem, and great end.

[Abbie]

Sophie, how did you know what i was thinking?!?! no fairrrrrr. lol. But actually, I was thinking of making a book out of this poem. And so glad that you liked it Sophie! U 2 Ice Girl! Thanks for reviewing you two!!!!!

[Sophie]

I really really liked this! A little long, but that's your style, to give a story in a poem. I loved the story... maybe a new book????

[Ice Girl]

I loved it! It was a sad, but great poem.