Nature is indeed a thing of beauty, at times, but it is often quite the opposite because its indifference. We focus on the nice, the feel-good, the pretty, but don't pay as much heed to the destructive. I have actually seen comments on a tornado..."it is evil." No, it just is. Anyway, your poem has much potential, yet it struggles in both flow and reasoning. Yes, we are to live with nature, but "In you we are to be dissolved.." (???) Come now. The poem also splinters at the very end leaving me at least quite disappointed. You are better than this work.
Nature is indeed a thing of beauty, at times, but it is often quite the opposite because its indifference. We focus on the nice, the feel-good, the pretty, but don't pay as much heed to the destructive. I have actually seen comments on a tornado..."it is evil." No, it just is. Anyway, your poem has much potential, yet it struggles in both flow and reasoning. Yes, we are to live with nature, but "In you we are to be dissolved.." (???) Come now. The poem also splinters at the very end leaving me at least quite disappointed. You are better than this work.
beautiful~touching~
what man has done to the womb that keeps him fed and warm and amazed at beauty~ he has treated with the utmost disregard and violence through eons~
poignant~ and truly deeply moving~
Nature .. the closest i know to the Creator .. it pains to see our brothers plundering and destroying our Giver in such a shameless manner . even i ask in unison with you - " O mother earth ! forgive them " ...
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