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A Poem by Soren

If I changed over time

And you loved the old me

Now estranged in clime

When did you stop loving what I be?

© 2023 Soren


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A lot of truth depicting that men are from mars and women from Venus scenario. Nice work.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Soren

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you Andrew for resurrecting one of my older poems. Your review and comments are most appreciat.. read more
Hellos, that's a terrible note. A tragic sense, love it;
:D ----Maynard

Posted 5 Months Ago


Soren

5 Months Ago

Thanks for dipping into my old stuff. I thought that this one was buried for good.
1809 Black Plague December

5 Months Ago

it truly is a sense of acceptability (prejudice) :D in terms of partiality where your love wants an.. read more
This is definitely a woman's question and I don't think it's funny. But evey man has to deal with that at some point. The most extreme instance that I'm aware of happened about 2 years ago. A blind man was wholeheartedly loved by a certain lady who opted to be his sweetheart despite his condition. They were happy together until the man underwent a surgical procedure that restored his sight. Then he opted out of the relationship because in his words "she wasn't as beautiful as he expected". Your piece is thought provoking.
Akinlolu.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Soren

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much for reviewing this older piece of mine. I think you may be right on the whole. It .. read more
Akinlolu

8 Months Ago

Hmnn. Thanks for explaining further
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I am new here and also new to writing poetry. Could you please explain the word clime to me? Also I love the last line.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Soren

11 Months Ago

Thank you for your review and inquiry. Clime refers to a region determined by its climate
CC

11 Months Ago

Thank you for the reply.
Hmmm, someone once said, "women marry men expecting them to change, and they NEVER do. Men marry women, expecting them to never change, and they ALWAYS do." I think there is truth in those words.

Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Soren

11 Months Ago

So true. Thank you for your review and most interesting comment.
A profoundly moving question that one who has ever loved or been loved must grapple with at some point in life. Because change is inevitable and a part of life. Is love measured by it? Does it define its value? Love is easy to convey when it's new harder to keep when it's old. An excellent piece my friend.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Soren

11 Months Ago

Tshank you Carlos your review and comments are deeply valued/
The questions of love. Love can run away from us or can run to us. I enjoyed the poetry. You questions something with so many answers. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Months Ago


Soren

11 Months Ago

Thanks Coyote for the review and kind words. Yes love is a word that has many connotations. True lov.. read more
Coyote Poetry

10 Months Ago

I agree my friend and you are welcome.
The context of this is wonderful and starts out really great. The last line, however, throws it off for me due to the forced rhyme. It should be, "When did you stop loving who I am?" Of course, this doesn't rhyme; but forcing it as "loving what I be" does not grammatically make sense either. I would encourage a rewrite here as the poem is truly worth it.

If it were me, I would change both the second and fourth lines.

"If I changed over time
and you loved who I used to be,
now estranged in clime,
when did you stop loving the old me?"

Just a suggestion of course.

I could easily see you expounding upon this and turning this into something really fantastic!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Soren

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much for the suggestion. Yes I was totally aware of this and had written it several dif.. read more
Real love is accepting that what you fell in love with long ago is still the same today regardless of the changes...to a certain extent. We all change, our looks, our strength, our attitudes and opinions...it is normal that this happen. Some people grow apart and some people accept the changes. I know there are circumstances that make things difficult but anymore it seems if some changes their favorite sock color, the other half wants to leave them. In the end, be yourself, that is all you can do. Ih...fantastic 4 line mind bender my friend.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Soren

11 Months Ago

Thanks Will your reviews and comments are deeply valued. Your answer is correct but one often asks t.. read more
This was an interesting read. An old and dear childhood friend came by to visit me one day. And we went out driving, going nowhere, like we used to do. He had been working in Alaska for ten years, it had been longer since we had seen each other. We drove and talked and talked and drove until my friend said to me, see, this is why I love you, things change, times change but you never do. Love is dependable in its continuance and understanding. We all must change outwardly. But Shakespeare called love the "ever fixed mark" and I think that's what my friend meant. Our friendship remained regardless of changes around us.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Soren

11 Months Ago

Such a wonderful story my friend. Yes I believe you are right, true love does not die. It is those t.. read more
Fabian G. Franklin

11 Months Ago

Ah, yes. That sort don't want love...they want a "trade". Love that comes with expectation isn't lov.. read more

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