Seeds

Wild oats sown, now grown, what harvest do I expect?

sprouted lies a field of flies discarded respect

A word spoken now broken chiseled crack in minds wall

revealing a token now awoken casting dark shadows over all

A wind blew o'er heart blue abandoned on empty sea

No land in sight of a feathers flight the reaper laughs with glee

Blind light bleeds o'er fertile seeds on hard ground thrown

Darkness revealed the shield of what I never dared to own

Melting clouds, dissolves torn shrouds new born sun blazing bright

Lull in the storm a path to transform, daybreak's after night

Reviews

[DIVYA]

What one sows, one reaps. No good harvest can come from a field of reckless deeds and negativity. In the second verse, again the scape is grim. A heart is abandoned and seeds sown on hard ground are distressed in harsh light. I love the biblical references you have used throughout and that makes this poem so special. In a contrast, the concluding lines bring light and positivity. The cycle of darkness and light is complete. A very thought provoking write, dear Soren. Loved it.

[Soren]

Thank you Divya for the read and having gotten right to the core of the poem. Your comments are always so welcome and highly anticipated.

[Poetic Beauty]

The first stanza in this poem makes me think of a passionate affair built on lies and it come crumbling down leaving a blues sea of tears and mistrust and as the journey through life continues a new dawn is found with sturdy ground and relationship.

I could be wrong but this is what spoke to my with all the vivid natural images painted in this poem so eloquently written.

[Soren]

Thanks so much for the review and insightful words they are most appreciated.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Once we settle down...there is a lull...but writers can raise that current over and over, more storms, more lulls, more harvests.
your poems realease the shadows...and give us the sun.
j.

[Soren]

Thank you friend for your most encouraging words of support. They are deeply appreciated.

[JD Major]

"Lull in the storm a path to transform ..."
Love this line. Good write.
Living life, gaining experience, reaching a level of wisdom and seeing Hope's opportunity ...
JD

[Soren]

Thanks JD appreciate the read and comment.

[emmajoygreen]

Fine and interesting meter, telling a story that leaves a moral clearly learned: true or not. One's youth throws up so many memories, some better and wiser than many but - tis said that experience either makes or breaks you! There's true human spirit running through your words. As I finished reading I wanted to cheer, did so and nodded, understanding those feelings pretty well!

[Soren]

Thanks Emmajoy for the read and encouragement. Your kind words are appreciated and deeply valued.

[emmajoygreen]

You're more than welcome. Enjoy your day, come what may. Do as you want not - what others say. (Or something equally poetic!)