sidewalks

I.

footsteps

i cant concentrate

with the sound of our silence

ringing in my ears

II.

i dig my nails into my palm

i should say something

shouldn/t i?

but i am too nervous

and my palm hurts

III.

we drift closer together

and farther apart

like waves

not the swell of the tide

but gentle sound

two sine curves

light waves the color of your eyes

the color of the sea

IV.

i am a quiet person

but i’ve never been at a loss for words

when i needed them

until i met you.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what a great ending. I relate to this poem very much...even being much older now, still the same for me.
Easy to have conversations with women, and be friends with them. But when it comes to someone I want to date...mum's the word---total loss for words.
and sometimes there are comfortable silences, but other times such awkward ones.

j.

[Daisy Ackerman]

Thank you so much. I'm glad you could relate

[transentience]

You are able to convey things simiarly to how i feel but in a very effortlessly consuming way. you have a great emotional intelligence. thank you for bringing clarity in your wisdom

[Shon Harvis]

This is spectacular! I love the line


"light waves the color of your eyes

the color of the sea"

this is beautiful.

[Daisy Ackerman]

thank you :)

[Doodley]

I loved this Daisy. So much in fact that .......ummmm......ahhhh... I'm lost for words too! Very nice work.

[Asante]

This was a really good read! My favorite bit had to be the third stanza. The play on sounds in that one was something remarkable. Overall a solid piece. Good work!

[WillGrant]

Very well written. I enjoyed reading it. "I can't concentrate with the sound of our silence ringing in my ears" I love that line. I love a lot of lines in this one. I'd write them all, but i'd just be rewriting the whole peom here. :) thanks for sharing

[Sai]

this is so beautiful and heartfelt. :)