Encircle

The feeling of you on my lips

Knowing every breath

I breathe in 

Kills me a little more

I don't know why

I cant find it in me to care

That as you embrace my lungs

with that everlasting relief

That shoots up through my nerves

No matter how much my health depends on it

I could not live without you. 

Author's Note

another late night write!

Reviews

[Maxine]

Beautifully bittersweet!!
I love the last two lines " No matter how much my health depends on it I could not live without you."

Its so tragic and heartbreaking, yet so lovely.

[plainme]

this one raises a question (again) which I like to throw in discussions: is bein dependant on someone okay and if so, to what level? From personal experience I know it can make or break a relationship, and I've done both. To some extent it's good, but if it goes over the top, you're breaking a person and tyeir trust, not only for you but also for other candidates after you. I particulary like the spontanous feel to it, and as many poems about 'Love' they have this air of innocence. I's true, that we do need to be dependant but we cqn't fuse or confuse our own identity with another. Good late night write & thanks for sharing, my apologies for the perhaps off topic ideology!

[Tai Ryens]

I've come to despise this feeling, except kissing would be a metaphor for kissing, if that makes sense. Dependency is a frightening thing, and once you are trapped in the loop of it, it's quite difficult to escape. To be honest, I have tried repeatedly to write a poem about the irony of being clingy, and never once have I been happy with the results. So simple, so delicate; a mobius strip of love..
Well done.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

Um... silent and somber but there is this, "I cand find.." ~ (can't)?

[Simon Welsh]

Sometimes we do better alone. I like.