Butterscotch

He's incredibly handsome

with a soothing voice

that sends tingles up my spine. It has a bit of an

edge to it, just a tint to make you squirm. 

He doesn't know it but

I find him attractive in every which way. 

Everything he does, the way he moves, the way he talks 

and flashes me

the smallest glances yet so noticeable with his dark brown

chocolate eyes that warm my soul.

His skin like butterscotch, smooth as it too. 

My fingers itch to touch it, when he's in view. 

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the description of "chocolate eyes" and "skin like butterscotch"

would like to see imagery extended like that in first part of poem...more similes and metaphors...
I think this could be such a good poem...if pushed to the limits a bit more.
j.

[Shoshana]

Thank you so much for your review. I find it very helpful and totally agree with you. I'll work on it. :)
-S

[Dave]

So very descriptive, you've been watching this guy a lot and for some time. Sounds like love or at least a serious crush.

Take care - Dave

[Shoshana]

Thank you so much. I try to be descriptive. :)

[Dave]

No admission - huh?
Take care - Dave

[Jovilious]

[Jovilious]

WOWOWOWOWOW
this is ....
so amazing.
I cannot even fathom it to you.
AGH.
ITS BEAUTIFUL.

[Shoshana]

Whyy Thank You! It's about Raphael Santiago :)