Hello

When you're afraid to talk to someone!

Hello,

you don't know me,

but I wish you did

my heart will be unsatisfied

until I make myself known to you

 

Hello,

one simple word,

but I'm unable to speak when I see you

my legs fail to move, they want obey

all I can do is stare

 

Hello,

you're so handsome

your dimples make me smile

our bodies  would fit together like a puzzle

the sound of your voice is like  music to my ears

 

Hello,

I know you see me staring,

the want in my eyes does not lie

Do you feel the same?

Do you want me too?

 

Hello,

I close my eyes and I see you

we're arm in arm,

your lips teasing mine

you're undressing me with your eyes

 

Hello,

one simple word I have decided to say

all you can do is turn me away

I put one foot in front of the other

as I near you I realize I can't do it

 

Tears streams down my freckled face,

I turn to walk away

I feel the warmth of a hand on my shoulder

I turn around, then I hear one simple word

 

"Hello"

 

Author's Note

Tell if it's good or bad! Thank you!!!

Reviews

[HopelesslyDevoted]

definitly good! too good! the ending is heart renchingly sad.

[Honey]

waah.. that was nice ^0^
i like the ending, "Hello"

[JanieB]

Good write. I like it.

[Cherrie Palmer]

this is so cute, loved it

[Goodbye]

This is so sweet, so honest in emotion...You keep kicking it up a notch - excellent!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

beautiful expressives with an emotional uplift of possibilities well placed with the ending of "Hello"~

[A.hasnain]

Wow!!!! I was actually genuinely astonished by how much quality this one piece of writing has! keep it up x

[jazmin]

this was great you have serious talent! keep writing!



~unimmortal ;-d

[The unknown writer]

i really enjoy reading this. its a beautiful and i felt it =] keep writing.
~The Unknown Writer

[closed]

Deffinitely felt this poem through and through.
Keep writing prodigy^

-Dream