Our Unlived Romance

Bad dream has been bothering me, and I finally decided to write a poem off of it.

Here they stood in one another's arms,
They loved truly, him and her.
Hearts bound tightly, interwoven,
Destined to be swiftly broken.

No, they could not live their love.
It was strong, it was pure.
The circumstances were off,
He simply couldn't be hers.

They shared one last sweet kiss,
Looked into one another's eyes
And with their hearts falling down
They said their last goodbyes.

And thus she walked out of his life,
Forever.

Reviews

[~amanda~]

oh my god. that is so sad. i wrote a poem a long time ago and it had a line that was like "i see your fingers holding hers, intertwined, in a way i never got to hold you"

this poem makes me want to go back and re write that poem... i seriously think this poem is great! it is artistic and inspirational... so tragic but thats how i like my poems... good job!

[Mark Salinger]

This is quite sad. I can't begin to tell you how many dreams I've had like this. You're a fine poet. I hope to read more soon.

[fireblossom]

Well said. Nice flow and simple. The way this sort of statement feels right. I always wanted "the one" but never found her. Though I have tasted what you write here a time or five.

Good writing.

[allwrite]

Wow, big bro'. Thanks for making me need to explain to my co-workers why I'm crying. Beautiful write. It rings so true for me. I am so moved I'm speechless.
AW

[♥ Courtney &hear..]

My heart was
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throughout this whole piece. Thats an awful mental image and it makes me sad that this has been in your heart and you didnt tell me :(

[HeartsBinded]

This is heartbreaking.

These dreams always leave you breathless and shaken, like a brush with danger, and they always come at the most inconvenient momennts. They are terrifying, but they are just dreams.

Everything is almost always sunny again when you wake up, but the feeling lingers still, like smoke in a jar.

[Nick Erickson]

This is a dream that will wake you, feeling like your hearts already been broken and then - make you mad she walked out your life - when everything is just fine.

Very good write, with the feeling of reality.

Well done!!

[Tangerine]

Interesting, the way you wrote this. I actually felt it.

[Tai Chi Italy]

oh John!lol you are a bad young man, worrying me up like this!lol It breaks my heart but this is life as Tai knows it. A grown up and dignified write theoretically!lol Remember to stay friends, love your pic!lol so cute. Smiling at you, with a hug from Tai

[Mysty Rayn]

So sad, so sweet, so well done!