Dream world

tie your hand on mine
hold it tier
and hold me too...
Build with me our dream home
and don't let me be alone
don't leave me
because without you
my life is a burning dairy
and and empty one ..
hold me through my ups and downs
and hug me everyday tier ...
Draw me a Monaliza
Is Davenchi better than you
i will draw you in my words
just like Shakespeare ...
move with me  
to the world of dreams
fly with me
and be my love for ever
and don't let me go
because life is hard without you
and you are my shadow
that tell me everyday
there is a light coming on the life one day ...

Reviews

[EMF]

I love this, the immediacy of flow, the imagry, the method of approach and style. It is very well handled

[TJ]

very emotive poem!

eevn though it seems to be a love poem it has a feel of tragedy about it, of complete submission and attachment.
few minor spelling errors

good piece

[Yina]

Absolutely beautiful!:) I feel this way about a certain someone to:)

[Cherry Lai^_^♥~~]

Wonderful poem.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Wonderful love poem :) Metaphors used here are awesome