Pull Me Down.

Pull Me Down.

A Poem by .SaveSydney!.
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I don't think this is my best, and I was questioning even posting it..please review. :)

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I am laying,

On this cloud.

Loving the soft, white nothingness..

Enjoying the concept

Of happiness.

 

But of course;

My cloud turns black.

I feel a rock under me,

Getting heavier by the second.

So gravity shoves me down,

Connecting sky to ground.

My happy cloud,

Is nowhere to be found.

 

You now worry me,

Instead of bringing joy..

 You are my gravity.

 

© 2010 .SaveSydney!.


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.SaveSydney!.
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Wow very deep. We all need to be grounded from time to time. Good job :D

Posted 10 Years Ago


"So gravity shoves me down, connecting sky to ground."

This is a good poem, I like it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow! This was really great! Fantastic job, very smooth!

Posted 10 Years Ago


this was fantastic it had a beautiful flow keep up the good work



100/100

Posted 10 Years Ago


very nice. i love the flow to this.

"My happy cloud,

Is nowhere to be found.



You now worry me,

Instead of bringing joy..

You are my gravity. " love the ending! that was a perfect line

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Hai; the name's Sydney. But i'm sure you figured that much out already. Hah; i don't consider myself an epic writer, it's just something i do a lot. I'm very music oriented, mostly techcore, crunk.. more..

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