Love's Autumn

It's a sonnet...

Days go by as the nighttime does fly
Words of sweetness drip off those luscious lips
Autumn's chill creeps in, things start to die
Your eyes lose their shine as the cold wind whips
Your expression falls flat when I call you
Warm touches are now frigid; emotions raw
Our future looks bleak, now we're frozen threw
The ice cracks with every newfound flaw
Two standing headstrong, let the pieces fall
Darkness starts to overrule our bright light
One more try but the blockade is so tall
It takes more then just one to end this fight

What is that torch burning warm over there?
It is in the heart of a new love's lair.

Author's Note

...complete with iambic pentameter.

Reviews

[Nana Carmine]

I love iambic pentameter- I have fun playing with it. You did a really good job with it though. I remember it was one of the hardest things to write with the abab sequence and the ten beats... I always got too frustrated. with it to write too many
But I think you did an excellent job with it

[Emily B]

This is wonderful. I really enjoyed it.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Beautiful words - simple and elegant - I like how it ends on a more positive note. Thank you for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A wonderful write that takes the reader in and captivates them......Well done :)

[Robert Luna]

Very enjoyable. It is always a pleasure to read your words. You never really know what you are going to get. The image that this paints is so flowing like music being carried by the wind itself.


Great Job!!!!

[V. Lucien Maier]

nice flow. Seen a lot of romance poems that use seasons but this is done with its own flavor and draws the reader in well.