Pitch Black

Pitch Black

A Poem by Tamme

The stars shine forever

But forever doesn't shine.

If it did I wouldn't be so lost,

In the dark as to what's ahead.

 

My crystal ball to the past,

It is unclouded and bright.

My nightlight and warmth.

It maybe all I have.

 

Like a moth, I hover close.

I wanted to let it guide me,

Only to discover it's useless,

Set in its stone.

 

Occasionally I wander

Away from my asylum.

As curiosity over rides anxiety

But only for a second.

 

Stumbling blindly.

Searching for a light switch.

I find doors and windows,

Still pitch black on the other side.

 

So forever I stand

Frozen in fear

Of all things I can't see,

And what might find me.

© 2008 Tamme


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I sometimes still get frightened of the dark and 'sense' things that could possibly be there. Then I turn on the light... and they aren't. :P

I don't think that you're talking about actual physical dark though - I think you're talking about the dark of fear, of not knowing what the future holds and being afraid to go seek it out.

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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You did a wonderful job describing the gripping fear, but I have to add this. It's been proven that over 90% of what we worry about never happens. Man, your fear is palable in this piece. Rain..

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I feel a lot of fear in this and fear a lot of people relate to. I really like it. Great job, write on

~Nana Carmine

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a piece so full of fear it makes me wonder if you are so afraid to live life that you perfer to exist in a box of fear. Without great risk you will never know great joy. Is it worth the price. I think so. Well Expressed.
Debby

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree with the previous reviewer - I have always loved the dark - my sister and I used to fight over whether the hall light was turned on or not. Interesting, abstract write however - Thanks for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha


Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love your style, girl :-)

This line is especially great:
"The stars shine forever
But forever doesn't shine."

Very cool, Tamme :-)



Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm the opposite..I love the dark,can't sleep with any lights showing anywhere.
My best ideas come to me in the dark.
Nice write.

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

perfect boogyman poem. lol really enjoyable piece :)
Sandra

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I sometimes still get frightened of the dark and 'sense' things that could possibly be there. Then I turn on the light... and they aren't. :P

I don't think that you're talking about actual physical dark though - I think you're talking about the dark of fear, of not knowing what the future holds and being afraid to go seek it out.

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Great poem. I still feel this way, living in a building so old you have to go outside to get down the basement, and it's horrifying in the dark...you do a great job of capturing that fear.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this, maybe because I was very afraid of the things I could not see in the dark as a child and even more afraid of the things I seemed to "feel" in the dark shadows of my room. Good job.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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