Hmmmm Love??

You speak to me of your true love,

I speak to you on how lifes rough,

 

You speak to me of all you joy,

I tell you its just pain that you avoid,

 

You show me memories of our smiles,

I describe to you life as merely trials,

 

You tell to me thoughts of happiness,

I say to me that none is ment for us,

 

You said to me that I had worth,

I told you I had no soul from birth,

 

You said that you'd never give up on me,

I asked you please just leave me be,

 

You wished to god I'd find a better day,

You told me you loved me before you went away,

 

You used to speak to me of your true love,

Until I ignorantly gave you up....

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"You wished to god I'd find a better day,
You told me you loved me before you went away,

You used to speak to me of your true love,
Until I ignorantly gave you up...."

{you have a way with words my friend--awesome!!!}

james:-)

[kurrupted]

well i dont know what RTB means but from the way you juggle rhymes i could still say its "Rhyme Taming babe"

your poems have 3 qualities that really standout
1-the rhyming is awesome
2-its relative, kind of makes the reader feel "hey! i could relate with that" or "damn! thats me"
3-your lines are well connected making the flow blow, hot like volcano

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

Fantastic poem; I can relate to this on more then one point. The rhyming in this poem makes it sound like a lullaby; so beautiful. Well done!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

completely honest look straight into the mirror~ there's that song "You don't know what you got til it's gone"~ I relate to this from the inside out~ strong and cathartic poetic~

[Iota]

Well talk about in your face with the truth. I guess one can't complain when they was told from the beginning. They tried so hard with a battle that had already been lost. It is sad thou because it seems she really loved and cared.