Taped

Its about the bombs dropped on japan.

Taping the scene the scenarios synopsis,

Acrobatic in his art struggling he relaxes,

Pressured to respond he downturns and relapses,

Eclipsing the sun from the sky he collapses,

Diablo despairs as he departs as the fastest,

 

To whom will he cross with the fate he contrasted?

Over the top he soared not distracted,

Giving the command to who paid and contracted,

Ending drawn near to the item compacted,

To the island drawn near to the people adapted,

Help unrelated to the war that attracted,

Evil now ominous to the conclusion now fastened,

Rebirth of destruction through the next that would happen,

 

Fire as a private and be brought back as captain,

Inattentive indifferent to the past of their wrath end,

Xclusive producing a disturbing distraction,

Defacing the mass in a satanic refashion,

 

Taken to pain regretting abrasions,

Over the thought of misplacing invasion,

 

Reducing the number genocide to a nation,

No longer a fear of paying war reparations,

 

Viciously destroyed was the place of creation,

Ended by the selfish man made tessellations,

Reminded evermore by the explosives decimation,

Seemingly recognized by the people showing segregation,

Empty in these people but still seeing correlation,

Simply for the fact they act on immoral renovation..

Reviews

[Onyx_Rayne]

WHOA! ... I ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS! The flow is fantastic; I actually sort of bounced along as I read it.. The subject matter is very interesting. I love how it starts out with a comparison of the ,I'm assuming, pilot to an acrobat. The tempo picks up and grows a bit more fevered from then on..the tension building and building...

This is just fantastic - the rhyme scheme is amazing - I literally love this write :) I wish I could rate it a 200 :) :)

[Love Is Dead]

ABSOLUTELY LOVE THIS! i love how this poem flows..its amazing! love IT!!

[Faceless Love]

Excellent work. I love the flow of this piece.

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WoW--A very intense poignant write!!!

Great poetry---I Love this!!!

james:-)

[A.Lee]

I don't pay much attention to the world's politics and the wars that spark from it, so I can't truly comment on that. However, your poem does spark a lot of interest in that topic and is very able to make one sit and think about it. Excellent form. I enjoyed reading it. The rhythm was flawless and your similar end rhyme was very well done. Excellent work.

[Iota]

I wonder about our motives and those of other nations. It is like we have two masks one a religious one that we wear on the outside showing the world look how good of a people we are and the other a dark mask that we wear behind closed doors as we make decisions based on money or power and not for the people. This was a great write!

[Addie]

Good adjective use.

[Middling]

This is a good poem, but this may sound a bit strange but i think theres too muh rhyming in it, where it seems to me the rhyming becomes more prominent than the message or story.

[HorrorMaster]

Very outstanding poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

You went in many directions. We live in a world that can organize a World cup in soccer involving every country interesting in soccer. Make in organized and no violence. But we can't gather men to discuss peace and healing the sickness. Feeding the hungry and create places to live for men and woman who need a place to rest. Your words are powerful. I believe nothing will happen till the whole world stops and tells the leaders of this world. We are tire of the B.S. Your poem is outstanding. I love your usage of the language.
Coyote