Mirror None Purer

Idea by: Theodore Ramwell

Such beauty I hold in physical form,

So perfectly sculpted since I was born,

 

No blemish, no tear, no aging still fair,

But to look in the mirror not once have I dared,

 

You envy, you must, just my looks give you lust,

But to see my reflection is a personal discust,

 

Not ever am I gross, Never before was I dull,

But to get what I wanted I deformed my pure soul.

Reviews

[TTBoy28]

Very sweet! "discust" should be "disgust" - Still, very nice!

[Havatara]

This is so very true. Don't you think that some (not all, but some) of the gorgeous people are shallow? That's what I see. Every day in high school. Anyway, I saw that in the third stanza you said disCust. Did you mean disGust? That's the only thing I saw.

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this is wonderful, deep, thoughtpovoking..I loved it

[Dinesh Sairam]

I just thought you could change the unintentional rhyme on the first line of third stanza. Kind of felt like monotonic. Otherwise, a poem too deep. This indeed reminded me of 'Mirror' by Sylvia Plath. Here's a quote from the master piece :

"I am silver and exact. I have no preconceptions.
Whatever I see, I swallow immediately.
Just as it is, unmisted by love or dislike
I am not cruel, only truthful –
The eye of a little god, four-cornered."

Three days after writing this, Sylvia Plath locked her children inside a room and committed suicide by drowning herself in a lake (The lake part is not totally correct, some say it's a rumor). But she did commit suicide, due to the mental stress in her after a troubled marriage leading to a divorce. Well, whatever, she was a great poet! :)

[Robin]

now thats poetry, the contrast , the introspection , the ability to let the reader reflect within the lines . well done

[Coyote Poetry]

You create a wild vision. Your words are strong and the details made me feel the words. Beauty is just one more battle to fight. Ending lines I like. You are writing on a great skill level today. Thank you for the powerful poem.
Coyote