Stained

A rusty blade, I see afar

Absurd as it may seem

I feel timid

Have the nerve to bleed,

Shed some skin

To make me feel alive

Because at times

I feel like I'm dying inside,

I want to be alert

In hopes of getting past

All the mental hurt,

Say a prayer or two for me

That this anguish

I will be able to release,

It's better than feeling

All this internal pain

Will only bleed for a short while

And cause just a tiny stain.

Reviews

[TPK Stories]

A powerful poem...love the symbolism...

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you dear

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. When a person bleed. Can create a big mess.
"Have the nerve to bleed,
Shed some skin
To make me feel alive"
All of us need to test life. Can make us feel alive. No weakness in the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you for you kind words.

[DrD]

Okay Tarry, you know how I am about dark poetry but this work is very visual and is well formed. I do not like the theme and I don't know if there's a market for it but I have learned in this forum that it is popular in the younger set. I am not going to lie and say I enjoyed it because the theme prevented that but I do respect the skill that is obvious here and, of course, you have the right to express yourself in whatever form you wish.

[quinfinn]

profoundly disturbing yet well written and cleverly worded. two thumbs way up!

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you

[MOON]

Poignant bleeding to feel alive, release the internal pain.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you

[Lover Of Words]

wow thats all i can say about this one but it seems very real. Dark and timmed. But its how you feel comes across here

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you

[Lover Of Words]

No problem