Within Me

Within Me

A Poem by Tarry Franck

All my hopes
All my dreams
I saw within your eyes
Now that you are gone
I feel hollow inside,
When you walked away
We said our goodbyes
I never thought it would hurt this bad
Nor that I would feel this sad,
You left me in a whirlwind of emotions
I don't think I realized the depth of true devotion,
But on that day
I realized something new
You were someone I truly loved
And it hurts deeply to have let go
Apparently it will take my heart
Some time to heal so,
Now that I'm aware
And I have to pick up the parts
It will be some time before I let
Another man pass through
To just break my heart,
I will find the strength to carry on
As friends and family
Help me now that you are gone,
My love for another man
I'm sure would set me free
But I'm not willing just yet
To find those feelings within me.

© 2013 Tarry Franck


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Breakups can be terrible things. We cannot allow them to tear our insides apart, rather we must do as you said in your piece, rely on the love and support of friends and family and other people close to us to get us through the hard times. We must allow the heart to heal before we can love again.

Technical issues: There are several places where this could use a little grammar, punctuation editing-- "I realized something knew" should be "new", little things like that. Otherwise, well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tarry Franck

11 Years Ago

Thank you



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Breakups can be terrible things. We cannot allow them to tear our insides apart, rather we must do as you said in your piece, rely on the love and support of friends and family and other people close to us to get us through the hard times. We must allow the heart to heal before we can love again.

Technical issues: There are several places where this could use a little grammar, punctuation editing-- "I realized something knew" should be "new", little things like that. Otherwise, well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tarry Franck

11 Years Ago

Thank you
It's hard to go from one relationship to another but you captured it beautifully.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tarry Franck

11 Years Ago

Thank you dear
This one caught my eye just by the title great job on that! This poem is great.. With time it wont hurt so much i promise we are all here to help you though this.. You put your feeling on paper quite well and it speaks though your soul to the pen to the paper your heart is a very strong one... as for you you are the strongest person i know you can get though anything you set your mind too. And this poem shows that that every day you are becoming even more stronger then you thought you were the day before.. And writing things like this is a great help. so i hope to see great words of wisdom like this piece here come out of your soul like i know the woman who wrote this is a very strong person... This poem is more then fantasic its one of my favorites.. Nice job love... Keep it up

Posted 11 Years Ago


Tarry Franck

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much and yes I'm getting there
Lover Of Words

11 Years Ago

Anything for my dear aunt :) I am glad to hear it
time heals all wounds Tarry, and, as i am also fond of saying..time wounds all heels! excellent write, time to move along.....

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tarry Franck

11 Years Ago

I couldn't agree more Quin - thank you
quinfinn

11 Years Ago

;)

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