You and me

  You and me smoking

  cigarettes in the dead

  of night.

  Watching cars as they

  pass by.

  They don't know,

  they don't know the

  truth.

  Knowing it would

  burn them too.

  You and me sitting

  with nothing to do.

  There is no he,

  no she,

  just me and you.

  I guess it would be

  fun, to go out

  and kill someone. 

Author's Note

okay, just to let everyone know, my poems are inspired by the band metric. the lyrics in their songs are like my poems; they make little to no sense.
enjoy

Reviews

[Short.Nerd]

Love it:)

[Allie :)]

I was thoroughly impressed by this piece (and that's really saying something seeing as how im such a tough critic

[Bertie]

For me it shows an interesting exploration of the ideas of youth and the dynamics of relationships...
You have a very particular style which I like :
Well written :)

[Brett Forsythe]

This one left me speechless. I don't know if I really liked it or thought it was over the top random/weird haha very well done.

[Katub]

Been there, done that.
Loved this

[Patches I'm not so new..]

Reminds me of an old movie Ernest Bornnine's movie debute in fact "Marty"
not a very good movie IMHO although I believe it won the acamy award that year
this pme however is a good one.

[+Naomi+]

Metric! HELL YES!! Another Metric fan!!!
I LOVE that band, I've loved them since before Blacksheep or Gimme Sympathy.
I love the last stanza in your poem.

"I guess it would be fun, to go out and kill someone"
Pure genius, man xD

[raindroplove]

:)

[Jess Holden]

I love this!! Its so mysterious!!

[Jibin]

Nice work!!
Love it :)