My girl

This is a love poem I wrote to my wife about 6 months ago.

My Girl

You are the light that shines in my eye

Lifting me up into the sky

Floating around like a happy cloud

Forever linked our souls are bound

Your pure spirit is all I see

Look at you threw the eyes of me

Then you will see what I adore

My sweet Kate I wan t no more

No one else could catch my eye

You are beautiful as the sky

Your light shines as bright as the sun

My sweet Kattie, my Baby, my Hun

And now its time for this poem to end

My beautiful Kate, my girl and my friend

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

How important it is to be friends as well as lovers, confidantes and mates. Wonderfully expressed. Beautiful sentiments. I hope she truly appreciates your kind and loving words.
Light,
Siddartha

[Andy]

You express your feelings very well in this poem. Check your spelling in the 6th line, 'look at you thew(threw, thru?) the eyes of me'. Then again, I may not be reading it as you meant it. Just a thought.
Well done.
Andy

[Shelby Baker]

Well it's very nice and flows nicely maybe talk about her details. I think girls like when there guy can remember there eye color or if there guy thinks nicely about her hair or something besides that with or without changes it's nice and expresses ur feelings