Time

Day by day.
Hour by hour.
Moment by moment,
Everything moves faster.
I am turtle, moving slow and steady.
Time is the hare, going swiftly and promptly by.
The world moves with it, trapped in its speedy motion.
I sit idly, watching everything pass me by.
Time moves to quickly for me I think
I'd be happier if it moved my way.
Slow and steady.
But it's stays in it's speed.
Swiftly and promptly.

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not bad. Don't forget that you don't have to cap every line - this would flow better if you took out pretty much every period in it. You have a good concept and you've expressed it well. Good use of imagery too. The 5th and 6th lines are the best ones.

[Ilina]

I like how you've described time as 'the hare' who goes by in a hurry. It really is like that!