To Fall In Love

Our love story

We met at church

But it was just that

An exchanging of names

But that's all it took

I saw him in the halls

But he didn't recognize me

Though he still smiled

And that's all it took

We talked after school

But not for too long

We were never alone 

But that's all it took

I gave him a note

But I was so nervous

It explained how I felt

And that's all it took

After some days I saw him

But he didn't act like he knew

Finally he told me

And that's all it took

He called me a few days later

But I couldn't talk right then

So I'd call him afterwards

But that's all it took

We went to a movie together

But my dad came along

We held hands throughout it

And that's all it took

Last Friday we had our first kiss

But I wanted it to be longer

It was magical and perfect

But that's all it took

Last night he called later

But it wasn't for good things

He saved me from myself

And that was all it took

Author's Note

Okay so this is one of the first poems I've done in a while, so what do you think? any suggestions?

Reviews

[Bradley]

I love me some good repetition and you did a great job with it. I think with each "that's all it took", the meaning behind that line becomes more and more clear as we go - so much so, that by the end, I don't think the last line is even needed.

Now, I'm guessing you wanted to proclaim that last line, especially at the time of writing, but I challenge you to take a second look. By removing the last line, you take away the certainty of the poem and you add an iota of mystery - a little blank space where the reader can insert their own feelings and experiences into your poem. Its like you painted a cloud that looks a lot like a rabbit, but maybe, just maybe, its a turtle.

Regarding content, I've been married for 4 months now and I can say that since meeting my wife, I have fallen in love with her over and over again - each time of a different and new level, and your poem reminded me of wonderful it has been. Great job.

[ThisIsBatman]

thank u so much! now that u mention it, it does make sense. like, i was always questionable but i didnt see it as a mystery without it. i like it!

By the way, congratulations on your marriage!