They Think...

They think I'm fine

But I'm on the verge

Please help me, save me

Can't stop the urge

They think I'm okay

But that's not the case

I'm dying inside and 

I feel my blood race

They think I'm happy

But it's not true

I'm feeling so hopeless

There is nothing to do

They don't really know

But that is good for me

I hide all of it inside

And that's how it'll always be.

Author's Note

what do u think

Reviews

[CrookedDeath]

I really like the ending I didn't see the last line coming for some reason lol.

On a more serious note, I think that it's awesome that your so young and your able to channel how you feel into these words. This is something that if you nurture it can help you deal with things the rest of your life. Atleast, thats how it has worked with me. Don't be afraid to just write and not worry about structure or rhyming. I've written my most favorite personal stuff without even stopping to think of words just a solid stream of thought.

I try not to be so rigid in my rhyming structure most of the time, but I honestly feel there isn't a wrong way to write anything. If haiku's exist then anything is possible!

Keep posting I will slowly work my way through all of your writing and let you know what I think!

[ThisIsBatman]

thanks! i normally dont rhyme but ii thought i would give it a try, plus it was starting off that way so i was jus like hmmm

[ThisIsBatman]

also, you should check out Make It Stop next. its one of my better poems

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Well, this one is easy to relate. An awesome write my friend.