It's a very powerful peice and speaks to the soul of who we all are and who we all should be. The sadness carried throughout this write is one of a unique flow but it doesn't take away from it's beauty. I love the little personal touch on the end it really drives everything home and makes one realize that we are not alone in this world. It is very beautiful, Keep Writing.
wow, this is a really beautiful piece. it flowed rather well and brought with it a truly beautiful meaning. this poem really brings us into the heart and mind of those whose loved ones have suffeed. good job.
Compelling and beautiful. I love the change to a more natural speak when in contrast the outcomes was so sad. I loved this it was active and passive and told a compelling story. thank you for sharing this cheers
Amazing... brought tears to my eyes. Songs and movies do that to me quite a bit but rarely text. The repetition of "my sister" is powerful; it never lets the reader go. "My sissy" is so much more personal and just breaks your heart. I love this.
It's a very powerful peice and speaks to the soul of who we all are and who we all should be. The sadness carried throughout this write is one of a unique flow but it doesn't take away from it's beauty. I love the little personal touch on the end it really drives everything home and makes one realize that we are not alone in this world. It is very beautiful, Keep Writing.
I changed to sissy in the last stanza because the "sister" represents everyone's situation in Haiti - it is the general outlook on what kinds of disasters came to a large number of individuals, but the "sissy" changes the tone from general to personal to drive it home emotionally.
I am because my mother birthed me my father planted me my God created me. Life has unfolded for me in 29 chapters so far with two brothers a smile and a few good memories to show for it. I am because .. more..