mist

..feel the rain...

why does rain collides with pain?
in every drop
there is solitude,
with every fall
there's the cold.

even a love song
sings with this feelin',
within this drizzle
just like 'walking in the rain'
or listen to the 'thunder'.

victims of unhoped for future,
unspoken truth and betrayal
drowned with tears
of foolishness, of innocence..
all flow with the rain.

thunderin' sound
of heartbeats broken,
lightning from dark
dreams of uncertainty
sparks never- ending

sudden stops of rain fallin'
swiftly dissolved from heaven
left I, with silver mist
rolled down...
from my own cheeks.

-musicfunk-

Author's Note

a heavy rain last night rose up my alpha state after a hard day dealing with this cruel thing called reality.
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Reviews

[RachelReaper]

"just like 'walking in the rain" wordplay!!!! awesome! my only critique is that in the first paragraph, shouldn't it be "Why does rain collide with pain?" and not, "why do rain collides with pain?". that was the only mistake i caught and other than that nice work, i personally love the rain.

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks rachel 'walking in the rain is a song actually
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[Japanese Cherry]

Nice job... I liked reading it

[Inda]

Wow, wish the rain could do that to me! Great poem.

[CHRIS ANDES]

thank you
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[Draven]

There are a few grammar issues, but other than that it is a great poem.

[CHRIS ANDES]

ic,thanks I'll edit it as soon as i can
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[L]

The grammar of the first line was a little off putting but I'm glad i read this through. It's a good poetic metaphor; deep and well carried through :)

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks for reading it
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[Renée]

Nicely done !

[Sasha]

Amazing!

[dan nacario]

very sorrowful..the atmosphere of rain brings blended with the pain of the speaker in this poem perfectly..great write..

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks dan
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[Jetta Zippora]

Rain is a beautiful healing thing. This poem moved me. :) Brilliant write, friend.

[CHRIS ANDES]

thank you jetta
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[Jordan's Back]

Very deep and sorrowful. Wonderful write

[CHRIS ANDES]

thanks friend
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