WHY ME

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                     WHY ME?

 

 Why did you choose me out of a million girls?

 

Do you really love me?

 

Am i really your number one?

 

Where ever we go and if we see a girl you flirt with them that makes me debate if you really love me!

 

Thats not love when you figure out what it is tell me?

 

Love is gentle your rough love is calm your not i gave it up to you and know thats all you want thats not really love at all!

 

 

Reviews

[Collect-Eye]

this is really a blog, not a poem
a poem is a re-wording of reality w/ metaphors and/or imagery, not just a summarization in plain English
if it's prose it should have twists and turns
if it's lyrical it should have an angelic quality
etc etc etc...
not asking you to be as abstract as me or anyone else, but give me something that makes me think
and someone can judge me for posting this, but I was sent a friend request w/out being given the courtesy of a review
sometimes criticism is necessary to help someone grow
good poetry doesn't happen over night and it takes a good balance of desire ingenuity and effort
if you wanna help solve your man problems, start w/ yourself
start by empowering yourself and building your self image
ask him if he's really flirting or just being friendly, you'll understand his answer by his emotional state when you ask.
if he turns out to be a d****e, dump him and focus on yourself til someone better comes along.
I could be like most people and placate you and pat your back ,but what's the point.
There's a time to be superficial and a time to speak about reality

[Creep]

Interesting. At first, I thought I was reading this as a thankful blessing, like "Why am I so lucky?" But then I read on and quickly realized it was the opposite. And this wasn't a happy love after all. Sad & true that we've experienced relationships exactly like that. In the beginning they read as beautiful, and in the end they just a mask. Nice job.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Good question doe does he love for the person you are or just a possession. Excellent write.

[Dark Empress]

Aw, sad. But I can totally relate to this poem. Very good write :) Keep up the good work.

[PaperHearts]

Aww, a very heartfelt write. I liked your use of rhetorical questions, and the fact that you addressed the person involved directly. It made for a really powerful, believable write, particularly towards the end of the poem. There were quite a few grammatical errors/issues with flow, which made it a bit difficult to read, but there was nothing that a bit of proof-reading can't fix. Great concept,
~PaperHearts

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime we answer our own question. A man should never flirt with another girl in the present of the one he love. You are correct. Love support to gentle and kind. A excellent poem
Coyote

[Jaidyn DeVoir]

Great write, been there.

With love,

Jaidyn